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I will open my curtains tonight
Before I relinquish my bones to sleep
So I can rise and shine with the sun
At an incline that is not quite as steep

And I will plan my daily routine
So I am not required to interact
With anyone or with anything
Other than my path crossing black cat

I am the ghost of your former love
I am the spirit of your last best friend
Remember when I said I need you
Well I will not be needing you again

Never forget I am someone's brother
Never forget that I am someone's son
Remember this when you throw your stones
And you lash out with your wicked tongue
realityisfarlessexciting.......................written in 2011
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IdleOnes Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You left me speechless. This poem cuts deep. I bow to your awesomeness good sir.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2013   General Artist
that is really kind of you to say so , thank you :)

thanks for the fave too!
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SIGILSMONOLITH Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
i love your simple but powerful poems they are truly relatable in everyway 
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013   General Artist
:) that is the best compliment you could give me. Thank you.
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lovemypunkin7 Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2013  Student General Artist
wonderful, I really enjoyed it, sounds like something I would do to myself to stay the way I am right now, dont really need social interaction...just saying.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013   General Artist
glad you could relate. Always nice to hear your thoughts about my poems :)
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bunocerous Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Great rhythm and flow, and I love the message.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2013   General Artist
thank you :)
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Protagonist-117 Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I like it, well done sir.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013   General Artist
thank you. I appreciate it :)
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Kyoky-San Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Shiver by bones
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013   General Artist
:) thank you for reading and commenting
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cupcakekitten20 Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013
This is wonderful. Your writing is so good, I have favorited multiple of them. :heart:
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013   General Artist
aww I know you have and I appreciate each and every one. Thank you :)
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cupcakekitten20 Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013
You're so welcome :squee:
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MasterTalara Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Need more rhyme to hit us hard! Good though!
Final Verdict: 8/10
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013   General Artist
Ohh I am quite happy with 8 out of 10. Gives me room for improvement :)

Thanks for commenting!
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MasterTalara Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem!
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JennyLalalaa Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013
Another beautiful poem (: But that is no surprise ^-^ ..
This one is really touching..
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013   General Artist
thank you Jennifer :hug:
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BenHammonds Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013   Writer
Damn, this hit me right between the eyes :) wish my ex-wife would read this one LOL :)  It is good :)
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013   General Artist
haha sound like we have more than just music and a name in common xD
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BenHammonds Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013   Writer
yes LOL :) that is true :) Great work
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Nicely done. :D
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013   General Artist
thank you :D
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure. :D
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