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We were ever so worried
When we found the knotted noose
And scribbled diary entries
With tales of self abuse

Teenage tears and tantrums
Can easily be explained
But what on earth would cause these
Freshly dripped blood stains

We were ever so worried
When you locked yourself in your room
Painted the walls pitch black
And ignorantly we assumed

That this was just a phase
That it would soon come to pass
And pass it indeed did do
Far too soon and far too fast

We were ever so worried
When you dyed black your hair
No longer did we recognise
The child that was once here

Our precious little angel
Where did your shaken bones go
And why did you leave us here
With no reason and no note

We were ever so worried
To find an empty bed
No more teenage tantrums
Just endless silence instead

If we could bring you home
Take care and start a new
We'd sit our precious girl down
And ask 'whatever is to do?''
just to avoid any confusion ''whatever is to do?'' means ''what is wrong?' in my part of the world lol xD
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Grnideladeee Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013
I am a parent of 5 and I listen , however I feel I can never listen enough.... In listening we must truly hear. That would be with an open accepting mind. I to had very deep pain as a teen . Held it in. Survived, but I've been to hell and back. I hope their are more parents out there reading your amazing literature . You are truly gifted.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013   General Artist
thank you so much for your kind words. I am not a parent yet but would really like to be and hope I can be there to listen to my kids like you do with yours :)
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NykiiLynn Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
reminds me of me....
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012   General Artist
its sad to hear and i wish that more people had parents who would listen to their children more before its too late. I hope people can also see on sites like this that there is always someone to talk to if times get bad :)
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NykiiLynn Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
im about this close to running away again.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012   General Artist
nooo, people would miss you and i would certainly miss your inspiring comments :)
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NykiiLynn Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
no one would miss me.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012   General Artist
:( sorry to hear you feel like that

I am in no position to give advice but i try and tell everyone in this situation to talk to someone. If they dont listen then talk to someone else. Keep talking until they listen and take you serious.
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NykiiLynn Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
nobody but my boyfriend listens and understands. Everyone either trys to keep me from going by yelling and getting mad, or wants to go with me. :'(
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012   General Artist
atleast you have a boyfriend :)

i kknow what you mean. Rather than listen they just yell and get mad :(
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KBeth Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012  Student General Artist
You made me cry- And I love it when people can do that with poetry. You have a wonderful gift. Thanks for sharing your talent.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012   General Artist
aww thats very special. Its lovely that it touched you in that way.

thanks very much for all your comments and faves :)
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Vegetabelle Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2012  Student General Artist
TO all those who passed unnoticed like this, rest in peace. This is absolutely beautiful, Colin.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2012   General Artist
:) glad you liked it, Kerry. thank you
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Vegetabelle Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2012  Student General Artist
You are SO welcome!
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chewyraezen Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
wow. i love your style of writing.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2012   General Artist
:) very kind of you, thank you!
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Tinkerbellluv Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012
I really like this. <3 :)
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012   General Artist
i am glad you liked it :)

thanks
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Tinkerbellluv Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012
you're welcome. :)
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NYCrainbow6 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012  Student General Artist
that was a very powerful poem Col. I loved it!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012   General Artist
thanks Sara, glad you liked it :)
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NYCrainbow6 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012  Student General Artist
you're welcome! its really really really good!
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hotrodgrl454 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012
This reminds me of a poem by Shel Silverstein, Little Abigail and the Beautiful Pony, but much darker of course.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012   General Artist
thank you, i will have a read of that :)
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LoliMoetan Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012
Almost reminds me of myself when I was thirteen. I was close to suicide, until my mother saw the cuts on my wrists.. I'm purely glad she found out!!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012   General Artist
aww I am glad your mother realised something was wrong :)

thanks for reading and commenting
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LoliMoetan Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012
M'hm! And your welcome!
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Missunderstood28 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is a wonderful poem. You never seem disappoint.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012   General Artist
aww wow thats very kind of you to say so :)
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Missunderstood28 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome and it's 100% true
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CupcakeyKitten Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012
I wondered about the title. i'm really glad you explained what "whatever is to do" means. this poem makes me want to cry, but that means it's good
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012   General Artist
:) i almost changed title but then i thought sometimes its good to show people phrases etc from other parts of the world

i am glad you liked it :)
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sumgie1 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012
Neat poem. :)
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012   General Artist
thanks
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sumgie1 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012
You're welcome.
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singletm32841 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Humans are ignorant. We assume either the best or the worst in others and often that leads us to be blind to the people who need us the most. I love the way you depicted the ignorance of the parents, it is frighteningly accurate. A close friend of mine ended up in a situation much like this. Thankfully, her parents noticed and sat her down, asked her what was wrong, and she is healthy and happy as ever now. Which also brings us to human resilience, we bounce back and heal from things so naturally and easily- it's the silver lining. :) Lovely as ever and full of truth and raw emotion. Great job!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012   General Artist
thanks for the well thought out comment i really appreciate it.

I cant wait to be a parent but i know it will be so so tough especially when the children get to a certain age. I think its probablt vital to do the important stuff when they are young, lay the foundations. So they know, even when they are moody teenagers that they are loved and they can come to you to talk about anything.

thanks again for your words
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singletm32841 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I agree completely. Being a parent is going to have it's challenges- no one gives you a guidebook. But I agree, laying down the basics and letting them know early on about the important stuff, that's the key. And your welcome! It's always a pleasure reading your work (and I love that you take the time to comment back on everyone's words, it means a lot!).
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012   General Artist
yeah and i try to tell myself its natural for humans to become parents and have offspring so everything should be ok lol

oh i really appreciate everyone taking time to read anything i write and comment too. So i always take time to write back to them :)
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chalekam Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
The consistant rhyme scheme is really good and ending your poem with the title - very clever! Much as the poem makes me sad, i like how it educates us as human beings. Too often we allow others shortcomings to eclipse their worth as individuals. Well written.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012   General Artist
thanks for the comment

i agree totally. I like to think that to a certain extent people (espceially young people) do everything for a reason. It could be upbringing or it could be something they are experiencing now.

I am not a parent though and cant imagine how hard it must be sometimes
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Safe-As-Houses Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Absolutely wonderful (...in a depressing sort of way...). :heart: I feel really connected to this one... I particularly love that part about ignorant assumptions.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012   General Artist
aww thank you very much. I am glad you liked it and felt you could relate in some way
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kedonsine Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Awesome! :heart:
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012   General Artist
thanks!
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Kiwifyed Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Awesome!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012   General Artist
thank you!
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Kiwifyed Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
No problemo :D
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