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It's early December
We sit in our daughters room
Looking over her possessions
Praying she will be home soon

Just in time for Christmas
Her presents are under the tree
Ready to create some more
Of those beautiful memories

It's now mid December
Terror has frozen our tears
As our angels face is slowly
Beginning to disappear

Our lives are a landfill
For unimaginable pain
As her baby brother weeps
Wanting his sister back again

It's now late December
The festivities have past
As searches for our princess
Are slowly scaled back

A knock on the front door
The endless fall to the ground
"We have news on your daughter
A body has been found"
xxxxxxx
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TheFallingRiot Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
a body has been found, but not her soul. her soul that resides, still with you at home. she's always been your precious angel, but angels must do their duties. but no matter where you go, she will be the star angel on your christmas tree.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2014   General Artist
a beautiful comment, thank you :)
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EnlightenedEnigma Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Chills down my spine!! Scariest thing in the world is to be missing or lost....especially if you turn up dead haha no bueno. Good job :hug:
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013   General Artist
yay youre rigt :D when i was little i got lost on the beach and scared my family to death lol

thanks for the comment! :)
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EnlightenedEnigma Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
The beach?! Your mother is a strong woman to still be alive after a fright like that..!
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Fb-PHE13 Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
So sad... yet the poem is beautiful.
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mexicanpedo Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013
This just sent shivers down my spine.
Absolutely amazing, I can't point out how much I love your style often enough. Keep up the brilliant rhymes :hug:

-Dzeni
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013   General Artist
I was just thinking the other day when I saw on your page how one of you is struggling for ideas and inspiration, how i would love to write something that would somehow inspire you. I hope I can do in the future as your art always always always excites me :hug:
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mexicanpedo Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2013
You are the best! thank you thank you thank you :heart:
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nightlynxness Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013
The last two lines... *stab to the heart* Brilliantly conveyed!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013   General Artist
thank you! :)
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Sapphireb1509 Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013
Your poem reminds me of "The Lovely Bones". Awesome work! :)
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013   General Artist
:) It was probably an inspiration somewhere along the way as I have seen the film. I am yet to read the book but I have it on my shelf :D

thanks for the comment :)
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NykiiLynn Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
oh shit.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013   General Artist
lol wasnt sure if that was a compliment but then i saw you faved it :D

thank you! :)
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NykiiLynn Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
sometimes i imagine that being me.
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ADistortedUtopia Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Nice work here, it's interesting and emotive :)
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2012   General Artist
Really glad you liked it, thank you :)
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sleepy-kisses Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I love dark poetry and this is a fine example of why. I love how I felt the anxious anticipation like the family. Wonderful job.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012   General Artist
thanks so much for this comment, I really do appreciate it :)
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sleepy-kisses Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You're very much welcome :3
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CupcakeyKitten Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012
the ending was kind of surprising which made me like this poem. i like how most of your poems are kind of dark / sad
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012   General Artist
yeah, they do seem to turn out that way :) glad you liked it!
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Shine-Hikaru Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Woah.
That was just...
woah.

:iconrazycryplz:
:icontearplz:
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012   General Artist
aww thank you :)
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xBlueTiger Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Student General Artist
This is just perfection.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012   General Artist
thank you so much :)
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Blue-Disciple Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012
It's dark. It's real. It's gritty. It's intense. I just can't understand how you can make something like this! It's amazing!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012   General Artist
:) thank you so much. Really nice to read your comment, it's very encouraging to me.
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i-lie Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012
Omg that was so good and so sad!
Haha, I can't even think of anything constructive or encouraging to say at the moment.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012   General Artist
:) I am really glad you liked it, thank you
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curiouscoon Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Sounds like Newtown...... God bless those children. I live so close and I hate to see so much loss before Christmas.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012   General Artist
yeah, its such a horrible situation.

thanks for reading and commenting on my poem :)
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KaterinaTheStorm Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Student General Artist
This poem has a lovely rhyming scheme. I especially liked the last stanza.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012   General Artist
glad you like it, thank you :)
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trueshinken Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Very good
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012   General Artist
thank you :)
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iamPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I like sadness. This is wonderful.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012   General Artist
I am glad you liked it :)

La tristesse durera toujours
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iamPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Perfect.
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KittyCAT2330 Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa:(((((((
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012   General Artist
aww I am making alot of people cry :/ lol

thanks for reading and commenting though!
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KittyCAT2330 Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Despite that it's good and your welcome
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theflotinghead Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012   General Artist
:cries:
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012   General Artist
:( aww

thanks for reading my poem :)
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theflotinghead Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012   General Artist
You're welcome.:)
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kara-li Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
aw thats really sad
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012   General Artist
:) thanks for reading it and commenting
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katrinpafford Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It's amazing how words have such an effect on people. I was bawling after the first time reading this. Really well written!!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012   General Artist
aww sorry for the tears but glad you liked it :D

thank you
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