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Sometimes when I watch the sunrise
I imagine the first sunrise of all time
With so much potential for love
In the pure light of that dawning sunshine

God, you have given life to us
I see endless love in the tears that you cry
I am ready to drown within them
But you spared me today, I didn’t die

Sometimes when I see her smiling
I hope it’s because she is thinking of me
Maybe that time we watched the sunset
Or perhaps some other loving memory

God, I can see something in her
That no one else seems to be able to see
I just ask that when she prays to find love
You will direct her thoughts towards me

Sometimes when we watched the sunset
I’d imagine the last sunset of all time
My soul would not be cast into darkness
As your love would illuminate mine

God, today you will take my life from me
And as one last sun will sink in to the sea
Though I thank you for my life and for her love
Now is my time to become a memory
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Alex-1815 Featured By Owner May 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I love this! Can I use it for a school work? I need to interpret a poem from any author for a slam. I will give you credit :)
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner May 8, 2014   General Artist
hey :) thank you for the watch and the fave.

Of course you can you use it :) I take it as a huge compliment!
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Alex-1815 Featured By Owner May 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
My presentation was today and I got a A+!!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner May 9, 2014   General Artist
thats awesome news :) well done! i am really pleased for you :)
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Firefang500 Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
Amazing...
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2014   General Artist
thank you so much. I appreciate it :)
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GeorgieSummers Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is so beautifully written, and I love the religious theme through it, the way the narrator is talking to God, and how it remains... positive? I guess? Even when talking about death. And the way it describes time passing whilst keeping to the theme of the sunset/rise. It makes me think of a collection of prayers, over time. Really well written xD
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2014   General Artist
:) thank  you so much for the comment. Yeah, i am often thinking about religion or spirituality in life in general so it does seem to be a theme in quite a few of my poems :)

Really glad you liked it and thank you for watching me and faving me too!
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GeorgieSummers Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hah, you're welcome lol, and I'm sorry about spamming you with favs and stuff x'D

It's a good theme, just unfortunately it doesn't seem to be very common :L It adds a nice touch, and makes it seem rather... personal? I guess? In a good way. It's like an insight into someone else's mind and their way of thinking, because prayers tend to be quite private (although not always lol)

I'd give it a try, but I'm not very good at positive poetry lol, and a negative religious poem isn't really... good lol x'D
But you seem to have it honed to perfection! xD
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2014   General Artist
lol i always feel like i write sad poems but do try and end on a high most of the time.

And yeah, when i write i do it either from my own perspective or i try and actually become the person. I am often writing from the perspective of a teenage girl for some reason lol. But becoming that person makes it become very personal. Its what i like to do too. Trying to understand how other people feel.
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GeorgieSummers Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Well you've definitely succeeded despite the title suggesting otherwise, it has a serene uplifting mood to it, sort of acceptance, but ungrudgingly so xD

Pfft wow, really? I have a male friend who also feels more comfortable writing from a female perspective lol. Me? I can write from both lol, but I do lean towards male x'D
Perhaps this is a good thing, we can create a detailed insight into what it is to be of a different gender lol, if slightly worrying-ly so xD
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2014   General Artist
Yeah, for me i think its mostly because i tend to get on with girls better than guys. But it is good to practice both :)
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GeorgieSummers Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yup xD
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Vegetabelle Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2014  Student General Artist
This is so beautiful. there really are no words to even describe. . . 
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2014   General Artist
thank you Kerry :)
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Vegetabelle Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2014  Student General Artist
my pleasure. Love you!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2014   General Artist
love you too Kerry :)
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Vegetabelle Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2014  Student General Artist
:hug:
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cupcakekitten20 Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014
omg that almost made me cry. great words and story
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014   General Artist
I am glad that it touched you, thank you :)
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flamingodancer123 Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014
Wow.  What a beautiful, heart felt poem!!!  I really love it, you are a very blessed man, God has given you a great talent, to share with us all!!!  Thank you!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014   General Artist
aww so kind of you. Thank you too for the watch and the llama. I really do appreciate it :)
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flamingodancer123 Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014
I'm honored, I really love your work!!!
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EverBloom15 Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014  Student General Artist
So beautifully written!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014   General Artist
thank you! :)
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EverBloom15 Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014  Student General Artist
No problem
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Whetsit-Tuya Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014  Student Filmographer
Adorablicious
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014   General Artist
thank you! and thanks for the fave too :)
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Whetsit-Tuya Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014  Student Filmographer
Yer welcum :iconheytharplz:
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EnlightenedEnigma Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I always get the chills with your endings.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014   General Artist
that is nice to hear, thank you!

hope you are well :)
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EnlightenedEnigma Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I sure am! thanks for asking :aww:
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014   General Artist
no problem my friend :glomp:
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MySocksRock Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014
:heart:
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014   General Artist
:)
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SeptemberSkies2298 Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
very very sweet :love:
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014   General Artist
aww thank you :)
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yanesita86 Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Great Job!!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014   General Artist
thank you!  I appreciate it :)
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yanesita86 Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome!
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LunaCrimsonMoon Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
this is beautiful...
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014   General Artist
thank you :)
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pinkyaliya Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Student General Artist
Totally love this! Good job
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014   General Artist
thank you Aliya! :hug:
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