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I am too sterile and static
I can feel you walking away
Into the arms of the man who burns
But then again why would you stay

He is so young and beautiful
He lives life while I rehearse
Acting upon his desires
While I write about mine in verse

Our love was Russian roulette
Without bullets in the chamber
Passing the gun back and forth
Without any sense of danger

The fire in your heart has gone now
This cliché is not lost on me
Metaphorically I'm the water
That dampened our destiny

You said you would never leave me
But this contract was never binding
I want you to find your freedom
If there's a freedom worth finding

Beyond the love that we have
The excitement you used to feel
Believing that I was special
I was your sword, not your shield

In that I'd not only defend you
But I would fight for your love
But repetition led to tedium
I can see you have had enough

Your bruises have faded quicker
Than the cuts that sliced your skin
But beware that burns scar deeper
If you let that malign man in
i usually turn poems into songs but this time i did it the other way round. I wrote this song in 2010 and just adapted it into a poem :)

useless information, but it gives you something to read.

hi! by the way :) thank you for reading this :D
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EnlightenedEnigma Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I love it.. :hug:
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013   General Artist
:) thank you!
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DariaGALLERY Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
eah....i felt this is a song!!!! even some melody start to play in my head......

too good.......its really good one!!!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012   General Artist
oh maybe you can trying singing the melody sometime :)

thanks so much, glad you like it!
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DariaGALLERY Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
hihi)))) maybe)))
you most welcome))) i really like it much)
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Vegetabelle Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2012  Student General Artist
This is potentially the best break-up poem written in a loooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooong time.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2012   General Artist
:) thats very kind of you, thanks Kerry
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Vegetabelle Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2012  Student General Artist
You're welcome, Colin! :D
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noorelven Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012
Epic!!!!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2012   General Artist
thanks! :)
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noorelven Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2012
welcome :D
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coyotemissy Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Great work. Worth a read. :)
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2012   General Artist
:) glad you thought so, thanks
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NYCrainbow6 Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012  Student General Artist
wow...i think this is the saddest yet most AMAZINGIST THING EVRRRRRRRRRRRR
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2012   General Artist
:D thank youuuuuuuuu Saraaaaaaaa
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NYCrainbow6 Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2012  Student General Artist
your WELLLLLLLLCOMMMMMMMMMEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE
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Svitavotara Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2012
This is so amazing! :D I love it so much. you've got real talent!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2012   General Artist
aww thank you very much :)
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alivethroughart Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
:heart: I really like this so much - very sad :tighthug:
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2012   General Artist
thanks Judy, glad you enjoyed it my friend :)
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LoliMoetan Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2012
God, I'm in love with all your poems. Quite inspiring.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2012   General Artist
:) thanks for saying that. I appreciate it very much :)
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LoliMoetan Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2012
You are very welcome!
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AMPEugenie Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2012
I love that!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2012   General Artist
thank you very much :)
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KeitorinAmehana Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2012  Student General Artist
Beautiful! The emotion was really intense.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2012   General Artist
glad you enjoyed it :)
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victor555 Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
awesome i had lost my faith in Free verse poetry till i heard this
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2012   General Artist
aww thats really very kind of you to say so :)

thank you
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Silveracecard Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
She was running to the arms of a man who had been afflicted with active napalm? Absurd! She'l get what's coming to her.

This reminds me of some of the relationships I've had in the past, actually. The worst death of any relationship is the one that slowly burns itself out, because you can feel it happening when you don't want it to.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2012   General Artist
lol

yeah, feels totally out of your control and almost try to convince yourself thats everything is fine

thanks for commentings :)
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singletm32841 Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is so cool! You write songs? Even cooler. Anyway, I can feel the conviction, the conflict, and the pain in the speaker. He wants to keep her close, protect her from making a huge mistake, but he can't seem to do it because he loves her so much. My favorite lines: I was your sword, not your shield/ In that I'd not only defend you/ But I would fight for your love. Startlingly beautiful and timeless. Wonderful job as usual. :)
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2012   General Artist
such a lovely, well thought out comment :)

i appreciate you taking time out to write it.

its always nice to hear feedback like that.

yeah, i wrote songs way before poems. They lyrics were never that good though. So i wanted to work on them which lead me into thinking of them more as poems apart from the music :)
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Musical0Love0 Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2012
"Our love was Russian roulette without bullets in the chamber." That's fantastic. A beautiful line!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2012   General Artist
:) glad you liked that line.

thanks for reading and commenting, I appreciate your words
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xTurtlina Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2012
Woah I love this! I wonder how it sounds like as a song... I can almost imagine a music video too. XD
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2012   General Artist
oh maybe i will show you the song sometime :)

thanks for your comment!
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kedonsine Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
What Can I Say? They've Said It All.
This Is Simply Amazing!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2012   General Artist
:) thank you

i am glad you liked it!
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DSteffi Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Another awesome poem, great poetry as always. :D

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All the effort is pointless if you don't believe in yourself.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2012   General Artist
:D thanks so much!
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jeciwoods17 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Love, love, love it!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2012   General Artist
:) thank you! really glad you loved it
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ClarityofSound Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012
I can't find the words in the history of my mind's knowledge to express to you how beautiful I find this piece, dear. I feel the loss-the let go- in the words typed in the box. I can taste the bitter tingle of nerves as the speaker tells his "love" to go on and find that fire. I can smell the smoke on the skin of that man who burns as the warning for caution is handed to her in the form of an apology. How softly spoken this is. Amazing job, my friend. Amazing job.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2012   General Artist
Thank you so very much for your lovely comment :)

Makes me happy to have uploaded it. I am glad the emotions came across :)

thanks again. I really do appreciate it
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ClarityofSound Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2012
O///O O-oh, you're quite welcome. I really loved the poem dearly and it reminded me of one of my own characters, so I felt as if the poem were a slight part of me, in a small sense. Anyway, I found it beautifully written.
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TwistedNotes Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:o WOE. thats all i can say this is amazingly beautiful
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2012   General Artist
thanks! glad you enjoyed it :)
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