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The little girl blinked and he was gone
Unsure if he was ever really there
But she knew that something had inspired her
To do things she wouldn’t normally dare

A teardrop too many he once told her
Had brought him from the shadows of her mind
As those around her began to wander
Across her imagination's fine line

But now he seemed to have walked away
As she found the life she had long sought
He slowly drifted back to the shadows
From her notebook and her beautiful thoughts

And the fools around her carried the spades
Burying him with her imagination
With an epitaph etched on a tombstone
‘Here lies my potential for creation’

Though he never existed beyond her thoughts
He was as real as a chrysalis on a tree
The butterfly perhaps was her freedom
The caterpillar was her memories

But she still sees his face in the reflection
Of her brown eyes in the cracked mirror
Knowing that he is alive and well
And is always going to be with her

People never understand reality
We are just products of each others mind
See without her there would have been no me
To see those eyes looking back at mine
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10blue10 Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2014
I really like this poem :)
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2014   General Artist
thank you :) It was inspired by a very good friend of mine.
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KurenaiSensei7912 Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
It was intruiging on the first read, I didn't know where it was going.
It's a really clever and beautiful description of the creative inner world of a person.
One to re-read and think about!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013   General Artist
:) Really glad you enjoyed it and I appreciate you telling me your thoughts on it. Thank you.
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ktkeiper Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This reminds me of the Doctor and Amy :) Sorry if you don't watch Doctor Who because then this comment will make no sense. Wonderful poem though :)
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2013   General Artist
:) A few people had said that so I did ask someone to explain lol.

Thank you so much for the comment :)
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ktkeiper Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome :)
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nightlynxness Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2013
Very cool... gah, I don't know what to say, but I connect with this one very strongly ><
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2013   General Artist
:) thank you!
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MuriPuriChu-Chu Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2013
"We are just products of rach others mind"- that's sad in fact. Then I am witch eating on cementaries cats who is devil's lover. Nice...
But I think it may have a second side. As everything in fact.
Lol, that reminded me of something I wrote once, it was about an imagined friend.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2013   General Artist
:D is what your wrote online?? I would like to knnow more about this imagined friend :)
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MuriPuriChu-Chu Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2013
No. I think I've never wrote anything like that (story, poem) and put that on the Internet...
We may talk about that but not here xd.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2013   General Artist
ahhh sounds interesting. I will have to ask you about that sometime :)
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Sentito Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love the story wrapped within this poem. It is lovely.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2013   General Artist
:) glad you liked it, thank you.
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Inky-Paws Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Professional Writer
This is absolutely beautiful :')
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013   General Artist
thank you very much :)
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Inky-Paws Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Professional Writer
You're welcome :D
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ConvictionbyLarm Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Student General Artist
oh I love the part with the butterfly and the caterpillar, a wonderful metaphor… you're poem is like a description of a hidden side in my heart. You've created a wonderful mix of pictures in my head, thank you for this poem, it's helpful
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013   General Artist
:) I am really happy that you liked that part. I am glad it touched you and you found it helpful.

It really pleased me to read your comment, thank you :)
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kewlkeyboards Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013
This is an awesome poem! My one critique would be to change 'memories' to 'memory', I think it would flow better and serve the rhyme scheme better.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013   General Artist
ah yeah, thank you for the critique and comment :)
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kewlkeyboards Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013
you're welcome :D
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spelonberry Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Delicious twist at the end. Mm mm. Could put some chords to it!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013   General Artist
:) thank you! glad you like it.
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XxRockFiendxX Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013
oooooooooooo
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013   General Artist
:) hope that's a good ooooooo :)

thank you for commenting.
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XxRockFiendxX Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013
tis definitely a good ooo =3!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013   General Artist
:) yay!
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TheKnottedPoet Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013  Student Writer
Love this! Here, have a :llama:
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013   General Artist
aww thank you, I appreciate the comment and the llama :D
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TheKnottedPoet Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Student Writer
You're welcome! You deserved them both :)
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bunocerous Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Me likey..... I didn't realize the narrator till the end, and it was very good. not to mention i like the imagery involved in how you wrote the world burying him, and her knowing he's alive.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013   General Artist
:) Glad you enjoyed the poem. Thanks for the comment!
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giosolARTE Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
That is so asesome, congrats!!!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013   General Artist
thank you, really glad you like it! :)
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giosolARTE Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
*awesome
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ofelialoov Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
So very touching... This is a fantastic piece. :) Great work (as always)!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013   General Artist
:) I am really happy you like it. Thank you.
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DSteffi Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
insanely awesome as always :3
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013   General Artist
:) aww thank you
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victor555 Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
im speechless, have you ever thought of writing a song?
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013   General Artist
thank you :)

i actually started writing songs before i wrote poems :)
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victor555 Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
neat
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Tyranecia Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Why do I feel like crying? This was just... so amazing. I sincerely thank you for sharing.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013   General Artist
:) I'm really happy that it touched you. Thanks for the comment.
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Tyranecia Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
My Pleasure ^-^
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HylianSpy Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is so very magical! It was the very first thing on the front page, so I started reading it, and I was excited to discover you had written it. :D I think this piece can be considered one of your top ten best poems. :squee:
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013   General Artist
I know, i feel very lucky getting on that front page. I am pleased with how it turned out as its about someone very special to me :)

thank you :)
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AllieofLink1 Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
That was Beautiful.
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