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In her hand was a little jar
With a butterfly shaped motif
Small enough to fit in her palm
Large enough to hold her beliefs

And all of the hopes and the dreams
And the harrowing memories
She promised one day to reveal
The contents of the jar to me

Protected by the butterfly
Her secrets remained safe and sound
Each echoing in their own space
As there was no one else around

The winged beauty remained loyal
As the days like clouds floated by
It too was once a caterpillar
That never dreamt it could fly

Now like a butterfly she'll escape
From her chrysalis-like mind
She will shed all of her sorrows
Underneath the silken sunshine

And with a God given impulse
Wings will flutter for the first time
They will catch the wind of wonder
Into the sky she'll begin to climb
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pinkyaliya Featured By Owner May 9, 2014  Student General Artist
Still gorgeous
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner May 10, 2014   General Artist
hey Aliya :) thank you for the comment. Hope you are okay :)
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lhaksam Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012
i am so impressed by your poem...
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012   General Artist
thank you very much :) i appreciate it
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:iconredstoryteller:
RedStoryTeller Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2012
This is the best analogy I've ever read!!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012   General Artist
thank you very much and thank you for all the faves you have given me :)
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:iconredstoryteller:
RedStoryTeller Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012
Expect more 'cause I haven't read all of your works yet :) My friend got me loving your writings so keep it up! :D
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2012   General Artist
aww i just noticed even more faves :) you are very kind
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RedStoryTeller Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2012
No your writings are just that awesome! haha :D
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CrematedMan Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2012  Student Writer
Your word choice is fantastic; it betrays a vocabulary so advanced that you only have to choose the right words, rather than token long words and over-writing. Keep it up.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2012   General Artist
thanks for that :) glad you enjoyed it and i appreciate your words
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Nightfarer Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Simply beautiful... so lovely!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2012   General Artist
aww thanks :)
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ExaltedPoet Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:heart:
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2012   General Artist
heart but no squee. I will provide todays squee :squee: lol

thank you :)
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ExaltedPoet Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:giggle: :squee:
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Arwenjones Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2012  Student Artist
That's so beautiful...
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2012   General Artist
thank you :)
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Arwenjones Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2012  Student Artist
You're welcome. C:
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KarlaFluksi Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2012  Professional Interface Designer
Very beautiful :)
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2012   General Artist
aww thanks :)
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MySocksRock Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2012
"She will shed all of her sorrows
Underneath the silken sunshine"

:heart:
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2012   General Artist
:) thank you for commenting my good friend ;)
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:iconmysocksrock:
MySocksRock Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2012
No problem. There was more I wanted to say but you guys already know how I feel so it wasn't necessary. :)
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2012   General Artist
:) yep we do :hug:
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SIGILSMONOLITH Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
i met someone like this once but alas it was short lived she didn't deserve what happened to her
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2012   General Artist
:) thanks for taking time to read and comment
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SIGILSMONOLITH Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
your welcome bro
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sunflower901 Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2012
While I find the rhyme a bit awkward for my tastes I absolutly love the imagery :D
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2012   General Artist
lol i am kind of awkward so it probably fits that my rhymes are too :)

thanks for the comment :)
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Tinkerbellluv Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2012
Beautiful. <3 :) i love it.

Like always. <3 :3
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2012   General Artist
:) thank you very much
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Tinkerbellluv Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2012
you're welcome as always. <3
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Tigermoth99 Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2012
Lovely poem - nice analogy
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2012   General Artist
thank you:)
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ZomaS-M Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2012
Wow, this actually brought tears to my eyes with its inspiring beauty. And that's truly saying something; life has been so difficult, and so troubling, for so long. I have not been so moved by a piece in... Well, I can barely remember the last time... Thank you for sharing such a lovely, lovely poem! Thank you! Insta :+fav:
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2012   General Artist
that means such a lot to me that something i write could move someone so much.

thank you for telling me :)
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twilight-tiger Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I loved it!
However, if I may...i noticed theres no set rhyme scheme. If that how its meant to be? "ab,ab" or "abc,abc" etc.. The syllables were scattered with no pattern,i mean. For insurance, instead of "the cat died, the rat cried. The sky wept, the moon slept" it was more "when the cat died, the rat cried. The sky wept, while the moon crept away and slept."
The overall poetry and metaphors were rather beautiful though :)
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2012   General Artist
thank you very much for your comment I appreciate your advice :)
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twilight-tiger Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
no problem :) it was a really good poem~
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Venry Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Student General Artist
this is gorgeous, thanks for sharing.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2012   General Artist
oh thank you for reading and commenting ! :)
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UndertheShaydeWood Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012
I am transfixed. Image and sound resonate deep feelings and meaning in me.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2012   General Artist
:) glad you enjoyed it, thank you
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kedonsine Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:sigh: wish I had a muse
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2012   General Artist
aww one day :)
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kedonsine Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:sighs: just cant wait
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santi123456789186 Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
Simply Beautiful ~
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