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Happiness will remain forever out of reach
When love from your life you omit
To the girl in the mirror; you are beautiful
Yet somehow you never quite fit

Not the girl they thought you’d turn out to be
When you were a neonate child
Born with a raging heart and a raging mind
But with a manner ever so mild

Your scars aren’t always visible to them
And not only hidden under attire
Lacerations to the mind are just as abhorrent
When memories and dreams conspire

So girl break the mirror if you have to
And reflect on your life as a whole
Do you really want to spend the rest of your days
Behind a fašade of self control?

Please be strong enough to go your own way
Indeed go against the grain
In your field of dreams stand up and be counted
And maybe others will do the same

You are unique and you are so beautiful
You’re everything someone else is not
The light of your reflection will shine on
Through the looking glass your childhood begot
7x
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:iconbroken-blues:
Broken-Blues Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013
this is so so beautiful and inspiring, argh, we need to really get you published :squee:
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013   General Artist
nooo we need to get youuuuuu published :)

thank you sweet girl :hug:
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Grnideladeee Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013
You are beautiful, Ty for sharing your gift!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013   General Artist
and thank you for taking time to read and comment on it :)
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Photopathica Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013   General Artist
Hi!
We have chosen your work for our Featured Folder for February!
This piece has been featured here: [link]

On behalf of:
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013   General Artist
thank you so much, this made my day :) Really love this group and its pleasure to feature in your feature :D
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:iconphotopathica:
Photopathica Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013   General Artist
very welcome :hug: we're happy that you appreciate it so much :)
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MySocksRock Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
Wonderful Col. Hope things are okay.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013   General Artist
thank you :) yeah, things are improving :hug:
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alittlebitoffaith Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013
This is so true of our generation us women are pressured to basically be perfect our hair has to be just right our clothes have to be so freaking tight our curves have to be great and amazing we have to be skinny and beautiful we have to wear make up to cover our flaws we have to basically be Barbie dolls or models to get attention and I'm tired of it.
My philosophy is if you can't look like Calvin Klein models don't expect us to look like freaking Victoria secrets angels thats just messed up!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013   General Artist
very true! Lets face it aswell that most of these models on magazines, both male and female are photoshopped too.

I have always had a different way of looking at perfection too. I find people perfect, but usually perfect with their own imperfections. Like the things they might not like about themselves I find wonderful :)

thanks for commenting!
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alittlebitoffaith Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013
Yeah I think the same way coming from some who doesn't like themselves and who can barely look I the mirror I think the same way
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ofelialoov Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Another "wow"... This really touched my heart. I love it, it's amazing. :) You just made my day.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013   General Artist
aww thank you. I am glad you liked it :)
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SaveAceOfSpades Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
WOW!

A bit speechless. This in incredibly beautiful and inspiring!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013   General Artist
:) makes my day that you said it is inspiring. thank you
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:iconanubisgirl13:
anubisgirl13 Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013
Wow...no words can describe this....just simply ....wow...
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013   General Artist
:) thank you so much
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anubisgirl13 Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013
:)
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HourglassOfLostTime Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013
Awesome. Ironic that I've been writing a song on a similar topic, even with a similar twist about the mirror braking, lol
Sometimes I wonder if certain tides of inspiration wash amongst certain ppl.
Oh, look up the song girl on the floor by Ayria. I think you might like it 1_~
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013   General Artist
that is really cool to hear :) Oh and I will have a look for that song.

Thanks for the comment :)
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:iconhourglassoflosttime:
HourglassOfLostTime Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013
Thanks ^_^
Hopefully I'll be finishing it soon 1_~

& No :;):
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noorelven Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013
Wow! deep and thought provoking! awesome !
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013   General Artist
thank you! glad you liked it :)
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noorelven Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013
Welcome :D
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:iconlady-mystiana:
Lady-Mystiana Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013
Lovely....
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013   General Artist
thank you so much and thanks for the watch too :)
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:iconlady-mystiana:
Lady-Mystiana Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013
Your welcome.
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Poet-of-the-North Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013
While generally i go for the more traditional types of poetry, theres nothing for me to complain about here. Well done
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013   General Artist
thank you, i appreciate that :)
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:iconpoet-of-the-north:
Poet-of-the-North Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013
Yep. Id be honored if you checked out some of my poetry
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World-Inside-Me Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013
This is an amazing piece of writing. I love the soft tone you've used and the way it's been put together works superbly. Beautiful!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013   General Artist
:) thank you, I really appreciate your comment.
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World-Inside-Me Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013
You're welcome~
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SkyRayne-CreedSister Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Student Writer
Despite being in a classroom right now, I feel the urge to cry because this is so beautiful!!!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013   General Artist
lol I hope your teacher doesn't mind you reading my poem during class xD

thanks for the comment!
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SkyRayne-CreedSister Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Student Writer
Nope!! She doesn't mind! I'm the teacher's pet (for once) and I can get away with anything in her class!!
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DevonEaton Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I like reading your poems simply because they remind me of words that I forgot even existed. I've always got to remind myself not to use the first word that pops into my head because there are always better synonyms out there.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013   General Artist
Yep, I have to do the same. I sort of have a process of going through each word once the poem is finished to see whether there is a better alternative :)
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Demonsavior975 Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013
Oh wow, that is a lovely piece, you did wonderfully, I, and many others I know can relate to such concepts ourselves. Your words are stunning, I wouldn't change a single thing about it, the poems magnificence speaks for itself. ^.^

~Miranda
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013   General Artist
thats such a nice comment, thank you. Thanks for reading the poem and letting me know you enjoyed it :)
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Demonsavior975 Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013
Yes, anytime, be sure to send any more of your amazing works my way, as I do enjoy such pieces. It really opens my eyes to new ways of thinking, and relating with those around me. ^.^

~Miranda
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Con-Eressea Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013
Beautifull and sad, love it!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013   General Artist
glad you enjoyed it, thank you :)
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babyvfan Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013
Wow. Just wow
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013   General Artist
:) thank you
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SkyeSteiner Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Student Writer
The last stanza shook me and just--wow :iconwowplz: I can't explain it properly, but thank you. You just made my day so...
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013   General Artist
thats really special to me, that it made your day. Thanks for your comment :)
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:iconbunnybeatdown:
BunnyBeatdown Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013
Words cannot describe the beauty in your words
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013   General Artist
thank you so very much for your kind comment :)
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