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I tried so hard to pull away
At the end of the night when we kissed
But as you begged me once again to stay
I could taste suicide on your lips

And such an intoxicating fragrance
Far removed from the stench of death
Such a beautiful perfume of life
Of a lost girl hollow from neglect

Am I too late to save her my Lord
Will those lips ever smile again
When razorblade remedies are scarring
Her beautiful porcelain skin

You spoke of your sorrows till midnight
Then you slept in my arms until dawn
Awoke and cried tears until midday
For your past and your present you mourned

And when the last tear finally fell
I explained I'd never leave your side
Heartfelt words alone wouldn't do
I painted our future with pride

Together we created a masterpiece
A magnum opus beyond compare
I now kiss those lips on a basis daily
The taste of suicide is no longer there
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GeorgieSummers Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is just so beautiful, all of your poems are so beautiful :') Just the phrase 'suicide on your lips' is incredible and thought provoking enough, but a whole poem... and the storyline with it too and the language, it's just breathtaking.
And I'm rambling lol x'D
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2014   General Artist
:) aww thank you.  I enjoy those sort of rambles though lol

I really do appreciate it :)
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GeorgieSummers Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Continue to write fantastic poems like this, and you'll hear many more ahah

You're welcome lol xD
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pinkamainia Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
It helps<33
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013   General Artist
Thanks for the comment and the other faves you have given me too :)
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pinkamainia Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
np
I love your works :0
You're amazing at writing
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013   General Artist
that is very kind of you :)
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pinkamainia Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
It's true haha
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AvonForest Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013  Student Writer
Your writing is seriously beautiful. It leaves me stunned. I hope I can gain a little bit of the talent you have by the time I'm older.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013   General Artist
oh that's so lovely of you to say so. Thank you :) And thanks for watching me too!
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