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I find myself weaving the final stitches
Of a noose I have been working on for a while
I swore I’d use it by the time it was complete
If me and my sanity hadn’t reconciled

Each thread representing a flawed emotion
Which tightly woven together makes up my life
If you’re the one to cut me down from the rafters
Love, patience and understanding must be your knife

I find myself with a gun in my right hand
With only one bullet left in the cold chamber
I hand the loaded pistol with safety off
Blindly in to the hands of a complete stranger

Does this represent me opening my heart
And risking a life of abject, dismal sorrow
This God given gift of love is worth the risk
And cupid’s bullets can pierce deeper than arrows

I find myself perched on the edge of a cliff
And at this point in time I am feeling unsure
If the wind that’s blowing me towards the verge
Is real or in fact just another metaphor

That is representing all of the worries
Which try to push me to the seascape rocks below
Either way the wind will one day blow me down
But with wings of wisdom I will at least fall slow
realityisfarlessexciting
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:iconohbeautifuldelilah:
ohbeautifuldelilah Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2014  Student Writer
Brilliant.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2014   General Artist
thank you :)
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ohbeautifuldelilah Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2014  Student Writer
You're welcome! :D
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helenadoodle Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Powerful. Lovely work.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013   General Artist
thank you so much :)
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helenadoodle Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
no problem :)
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Wiccangermaine Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I found this very powerfull.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013   General Artist
thank you :)
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Crimsonoid Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Your poems are perfect :')
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013   General Artist
:) thank you so much
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:iconcrimsonoid:
Crimsonoid Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
You are very welcome! :3
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Vegetabelle Featured By Owner May 21, 2013  Student General Artist
A lot of what you've been writing recently is so deep. This is quite good.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner May 23, 2013   General Artist
yeah, feeling quite deep this last few months. I try and make the most out of a bad situation by writing a poem lol
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Vegetabelle Featured By Owner May 23, 2013  Student General Artist
That's always positive! My inner psychologist thinks that's a much better way to deal with things like that because it forces you to think about it a bit more objectively.
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Strudel--Cutie4427 Featured By Owner May 13, 2013   Writer
oh wow....

Randomly, what you wrote in the artest comments... Would you mind if I made my account name "realityslessexciting" ((If it fits))
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner May 14, 2013   General Artist
hi :) It is actually what the Rifle part of my name stands for. I don't mind what you name yourself :) I am not sure if it fits as I might have tried for it myself :)
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Strudel--Cutie4427 Featured By Owner May 14, 2013   Writer
I know, you did mention it some time ago. :meow: But it's still a really good name. That's why I asked, lol, since it is technically yours and I don't want you to get mad :)
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner May 14, 2013   General Artist
:) aww I dont really get mad, especially with you as you are always very kind about my poems :)
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Strudel--Cutie4427 Featured By Owner May 15, 2013   Writer
I'm truthful, slight difference. To be kind would imply they suck which they most certainly do NOT
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner May 15, 2013   General Artist
truthfully kind then :D
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Strudel--Cutie4427 Featured By Owner May 27, 2013   Writer
:D
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tuti1992 Featured By Owner May 13, 2013
This is brilliant.......i love it
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner May 13, 2013   General Artist
thank you very much :)
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alwasebeautiful39 Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
<3
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner May 12, 2013   General Artist
:) :hug:
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watsisface Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I smell a :dailydeviation:
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner May 12, 2013   General Artist
ohhhhhhh i wish :) thanks for the comment!
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blubbityblub Featured By Owner May 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
That is amazing.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner May 11, 2013   General Artist
aww thank you :)
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mexicanpedo Featured By Owner May 10, 2013
Beautifully written.

I never, ever thought of suicide as a possibility, or a "way out", how many people like to call it. Even when I had days when I felt so horrible and couldn't even stand my own reflection anymore, I would never have even thought of killing myself.
In my opinion, life is the only option.
Even if your life is a total mess at the moment, you always have the possibility to get up and fix things or at least try to fix things, you can turn your life upside down if you want to as long as you're breathing, you could drop everything, start all over again, it doesn't matter.
When you're dead, these options are gone. All you do with that is hurting the people around you, your family, your friends (and sometimes even strangers, if you decide to commit suicide by jumping infront of a train, for example..), you're ruining their lives by making them feel guilty and responsible for your death. I consider it a pretty selfish move towards those people.

There might be people who believe in an afterlife, because, who knows, nobody ever came back from the dead, but I'm pretty sure that even if there's a "judgement day" when you die, having commited suicide won't save your reputation there at all.

I think, the "meaning of life" is basically making your life valuable, making it worth living until the day you die, and really being content with what you have achieved in life until then.

...

Grah I'm sorry for rambling endlessly and being all philosophical about the meaning of life on here, but I had to say this when I read this poem.

Lena
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner May 10, 2013   General Artist
Hi Lena :)

yeah I do agree. It is never too late to begin again.

Sometimes though people can get themselves into positions where it becomes more and more difficult to begin again. These situations we can always understand unless we are living them ourselves. Sometimes it might be something simple like financial issues or maybe physical limitations.

Fortunately I have always had a positive outlook no matter what goes on. For example I have always believed I could do something creative and be a success at it. I have had to live with that belief right the way through my teens and 20s and still have faith in it. I am not the type of person who can just settle for a 'normal' life either which doesnt help. And not the type of person either that a normal life comes easily to lol.

But the beauty of life is that something amazing could just be round the corner. Not just the next day but the next moment. You could write a poem, create a piece of art, fall in love, hear a song that changes your life, make a friend who changes how you look at the world. All of those things go away if you opt out of life.

lol now I am rambling to support your ramble :)

Don't apologise for it though. I find it really flattering that the poem inspired you to comment like that :)

hope you are ok and have a great weekend! :hug:
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mexicanpedo Featured By Owner May 10, 2013
I must say, you're right with the difficult positions, I agree that there might be deeper reasons behind their suicide if they decide to commit it..
But even with those people, I would really wish that they would find something that would help them to decide to live on and won't give up the search for the beauty of life, that, as you said, could be anywhere.

And yeah, nice that we're rambling together now, I'm always glad when someone even reads my ramblings ;)
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner May 11, 2013   General Artist
I think its tough to imagine the depths they must go to. There are people who on the outside looking in have such wonderful lives but still they struggle inside. It must be such a dark place. There is a professional footballer in this country. He had retired. He was only in his 40s. He had money, he was loved by fans, had a loving wife and kids, beautiful house, new job as a manager. Last year he found dead, he had hung himself. There was footage all over the tv of an interview the day before he took his life. He seemed absolutely fine, smiling and laughing. But inside something very horrible must have been happening. Its so sad and i agree with you that it is such a shame that they cant talk to someone and have them realise there is a life worth living for. Like you said you can change your entire life if you have to. New home, new family, new job etc.

lol you are bringing out the rambler in me, Lena :)
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CrazyArtist96 Featured By Owner May 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
ATTACK OF THE HUGS!! -huggles-
wonderful piece, do you mind if I post this to my facebook to share with friends?
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner May 10, 2013   General Artist
aww i would be honoured if you posted on your facebook :) thank you very much!

:hug:
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Sanna2011 Featured By Owner May 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Deep, that was so deep into my heart. What a get poem, and thanks for sharing it. :hug:
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner May 10, 2013   General Artist
and thank you for reading and commenting on it :) :hug:
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Sanna2011 Featured By Owner May 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Your very welcome. :hug: :)
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Misguided-Gh0st Featured By Owner May 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
My favourite part- "And cupid's bullets can pierce deeper than arrows" it's true though! Love hurts more than physical pain sometimes. You'll be okay in the end trust me :hug:
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner May 10, 2013   General Artist
:) thanks so much for the comment :hug:
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Silencedbook9 Featured By Owner May 8, 2013  Student Writer
Need a hug?
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner May 8, 2013   General Artist
i never turn down a hug :) :hug:

thank you :)
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Silencedbook9 Featured By Owner May 8, 2013  Student Writer
No problem.
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artistic-heart13 Featured By Owner May 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Very nice job. Just wondering, doesn't cupid use arrows, not bullets?
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner May 8, 2013   General Artist
thanks for comment :)

I sort of wanted a changed from the traditional arrows and it fitted in with the theme a bit more using bullets.
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artistic-heart13 Featured By Owner May 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, I get it now. Cool
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Maxpaynegk Featured By Owner May 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is deep. Very good, love it!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner May 8, 2013   General Artist
thank you! :)
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Maxpaynegk Featured By Owner May 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome :D
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Lorenzo-Chan Featured By Owner May 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is amazing... c:
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