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We were found in a pool of blood
Starcrossed lovers in each others arms
Suicide note in your pocket
Your hand grasped tightly in my palm

You were wearing that red dress
Under your overcoat
The rain had fallen hard that day
Distorting the words which you'd wrote:

'Dear cruel world and everyone within
I am leaving you all today
With the only boy I have ever loved
Lay silent here next to me

Nobody understands me
Or heals my wounds like he does
He feels the pain and sadness too
and I think we have suffered enough

No tears should be shed on our passing
As our souls now reside as one
Look for us in the rain dew
Look for us in the morning sun

Listen for our voices in the wind
Whispering how everything will be ok
Life was ugly but our death has been played out
In such a beautiful way'
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ThatOneGirl303 Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Such a powerful write. :-P
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013   General Artist
thank you very much for the comment and the faves :)
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Vegetabelle Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Student General Artist
This seems like its familiar like you wrote something similar before. It's so beautiful though.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012   General Artist
thank you :)
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Vegetabelle Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012  Student General Artist
You're welcome!
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:iconpapership-lonewalker:
Is this the real life ?
Cause this poetry seem to come from a dream
Beyond mankind
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2012   General Artist
such a beautiful thing to say, thank you :)

I supposes easiest way to describe it as a daydream I had
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DariaGALLERY Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
nice and sad. But togather forever is the best ending) great poem my dear)))) =)
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012   General Artist
yeah, thats what i want too. I want my perfect fairytale and to be with my princess forever and ever :)
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DariaGALLERY Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
mur mur)))) so tender)))) i want too) =)
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alivethroughart Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
yes - Romeo and Juliet was my first thought - romantic but sad concept well written Colin :heart::hug:
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012   General Artist
thanks Judy. Yep, i was sort of thinking of this as an ending to a story i was going to write. It was about young love which of course was influenced by Romeo and Juliet :)
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LauraO1 Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Student General Artist
I love it! I think this one is one of the best you've done :iconluvluvplz:
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012   General Artist
aww thats great to hear.

thank you very much, I am glad you liked it :)
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LauraO1 Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Student General Artist
Oh no problem, actually all of your work is good :)
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cupcakekitten20 Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2012
so heartfelt ='(
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2012   General Artist
:) thank you
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extremerebirth1 Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Nice
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2012   General Artist
thank you :)
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SkyeSteiner Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2012  Student Writer
I may be cruel to say this, but they died such a beautiful(and gothic) death. :nod:
...I don't mean death is pretty though ^^;
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2012   General Artist
lol i understand you perfectly :)

thanks so much for the comment
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LoliMoetan Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2012
My far most favourite poetry of yours! I am in doubt in love with it. Extremely impressive, and sincerely flawless. It could not be any better nor worse... Perfection!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2012   General Artist
aww wow thats very kind of you :) Thanks so much for such a lovely comment

and the fave too! :D
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LoliMoetan Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2012
You're very welcome!
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MelodieRox Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:crying: That is so sad... but it's pretty. :heart:
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012   General Artist
thank you :)
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MelodieRox Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Welcome. :)
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Safe-As-Houses Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
As the last person said, it's a very sad poem, but it's beautiful. I love the way you wrote the suicide note, too... Awesome job.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012   General Artist
glad you liked it, thank you :)
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Svitavotara Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012
Very sad yet very beautiful. I really like this.

When I was reading it (especially in the first stanza), it reminded me so much of Shakespeare's
Romeo and Juliet xD
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012   General Artist
yeah, Romeo and Juliet was definitely in my mind :)

thanks for the comment
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