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Reality bites
Where as he tore shreds
From the pristine pages
Of the book you once read

A promise of a Prince
And of a fairytale
On those lonely nights
Serving to regale

And offer some solace
In times of despair
When hope felt as distant
As the love you once shared

Your book was unique
Though you try to replace
The words and the images
But you still see his face

Suffocated by life
Each breath hard to find
A broken, tarnished heart
In tumultuous times

Reality bites
But with your pride still intact
Maybe now is the time
That for once you bite back
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DariaGALLERY Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
yesh.......that once you bite back.............
hehe......i'm trying to keep a control of biting back)))))))))))))
love it, great poem)
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012   General Artist
awww you know if ever you need someone to talk to you can note me :)

before you bite anyone :)
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DariaGALLERY Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
hahahah))) funny bunny)))) sure i know)))) you're a good friend kitty))))
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AdrianosArt Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Wonderful work. Especially love the last stanza!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012   General Artist
:) glad you enjoyed it. Thank you
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AdrianosArt Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Student Digital Artist
You're quite welcome.
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DSteffi Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
"Reality bites
But with your pride still intact
Maybe now is the time
That for once you bite back"

Perfect. Just perfect. O.O

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All the effort is pointless if you don't believe in yourself.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012   General Artist
aww thank you :) Very kind of you
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BRRRRRRRRRRRRRRQZLLL Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
love the ending! bite back!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012   General Artist
yes! :D

thanks for reading and commenting :)
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MySocksRock Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012
Sometimes I wonder if you are writing about my life. :)
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012   General Artist
;)
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alivethroughart Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
interesting for me that I took several readings before I settled on my own thoughts of these metaphorical words - "that for once you bite back"-YES!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2012   General Artist
:D yes I always like to end on a positive note!

thanks for the comment Judy :)
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LoliMoetan Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012
Love it! ALOT!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2012   General Artist
thank you! :)
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Safe-As-Houses Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh man... I love this so much. Excellent poem with lovely comparisons. Awesome, my friend.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2012   General Artist
thank you so much, my friend :)
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Safe-As-Houses Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Anytime.
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LauraO1 Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012  Student General Artist
Love it how in the end you can bite back :D
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2012   General Artist
:) glad you liked it. Thanks for the comment
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LauraO1 Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012  Student General Artist
:iconnoproblemplz:
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CuddleSlut17 Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This piece is beautiful, always flows very nicely and your lines are always clean. Its pieces like this that give me some inspiration on mine great job.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2012   General Artist
aww thats great to hear, thank you :)
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CuddleSlut17 Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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Dreamgifter Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is really beautiful. I hope you're okay. Keep writing, love! :tighthug:
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2012   General Artist
Thank you so much, I appreciate it :)
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Dreamgifter Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
No problem :)
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WX14 Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012
Your poetry is truly inspiring!!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2012   General Artist
thank you very much! :)
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xTurtlina Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012
*chews on reality*
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2012   General Artist
lol chew on it and spit it out! :D

thank you for the fave :)
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