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The drama unfurling in my life
Feels like the shadow of my hand
That grows as it comes ever closer
To the light perched on my bed stand
In that I can feel the darkest cloud
Ever such a menacing sight
In time I can reverse the feeling
But only when I write

Seclusion left me with nothing
Apart from creativity
Loneliness it turns out, my friends
Is quite the aperitif
For the feast that is awaiting me
If I make it through the night
Tomorrow always brings me new hope
But only when I write

You approach me on a good day
And I will offer you a smile
The same expression on the worst days
Because my manners are so mild
But don’t take me for a toothless fool
When cornered I’ve been known to bite
Fear not, those demons remain at bay
But only when I write
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EnlightenedEnigma Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I always savor the last piece of a good poem because its the most delicious
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013   General Artist
yeah, its always good to end on a high. it can be really dissapointing when a potentially good poem has a unsatisfactory ending.

thanks again :)
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EnlightenedEnigma Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Your endings are ones I look forward to :)
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Broken-Blues Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013
'But don’t take me for a toothless fool
When cornered I’ve been known to bite' i love this line.. (:
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013   General Artist
:) wish i was toothless today with this toothache lol

thanks for comment and fave :)
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CuddleSlut17 Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is just absolutely amazing, I'm not surprised. I can really relete to this. l love the repetition as well. You have so much real emotion in your pieces. This is why I love your art. :)
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013   General Artist
:) yeah I try my best to put real feelings into my poems. I think the reader can probably tell if it wasn't genuine emotion.

Its about the only good part of me being an emotional wreck xD
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CuddleSlut17 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I totally agree. I'm the same way. :) keep up the great work.
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nightlynxness Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013
I... I FEEL this. I really do. Completely relate-able... How do you manage to bring out these so real feelings in your poems every time?? Wonderful poem, a definite favourite of mine!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013   General Artist
:) thank you. I just enjoy trying to use my experiences and how i have feel. I think we more or less all have the same basic emotions, which i try and write about :)
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