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The drama unfurling in my life
Feels like the shadow of my hand
That grows as it comes ever closer
To the light perched on my bed stand
In that I can feel the darkest cloud
Ever such a menacing sight
In time I can reverse the feeling
But only when I write

Seclusion left me with nothing
Apart from creativity
Loneliness it turns out, my friends
Is quite the aperitif
For the feast that is awaiting me
If I make it through the night
Tomorrow always brings me new hope
But only when I write

You approach me on a good day
And I will offer you a smile
The same expression on the worst days
Because my manners are so mild
But don’t take me for a toothless fool
When cornered I’ve been known to bite
Fear not, those demons remain at bay
But only when I write
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EnlightenedEnigma Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I always savor the last piece of a good poem because its the most delicious
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013   General Artist
yeah, its always good to end on a high. it can be really dissapointing when a potentially good poem has a unsatisfactory ending.

thanks again :)
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EnlightenedEnigma Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Your endings are ones I look forward to :)
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Broken-Blues Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013
'But don’t take me for a toothless fool
When cornered I’ve been known to bite' i love this line.. (:
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013   General Artist
:) wish i was toothless today with this toothache lol

thanks for comment and fave :)
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CuddleSlut17 Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is just absolutely amazing, I'm not surprised. I can really relete to this. l love the repetition as well. You have so much real emotion in your pieces. This is why I love your art. :)
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013   General Artist
:) yeah I try my best to put real feelings into my poems. I think the reader can probably tell if it wasn't genuine emotion.

Its about the only good part of me being an emotional wreck xD
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CuddleSlut17 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I totally agree. I'm the same way. :) keep up the great work.
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nightlynxness Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013
I... I FEEL this. I really do. Completely relate-able... How do you manage to bring out these so real feelings in your poems every time?? Wonderful poem, a definite favourite of mine!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013   General Artist
:) thank you. I just enjoy trying to use my experiences and how i have feel. I think we more or less all have the same basic emotions, which i try and write about :)
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DevonEaton Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ooo. Repetition is such a fun tool sometimes.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013   General Artist
yeah lol its a tool i use alot. its a tool i use alot.

xD thanks for commenting :)
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InvaderJD Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2013  Student Writer
this poem is just...completely astounding, it's phenomenal, I relate to this poem so well, the feelings I get when I write are those that nothing else can give. The feeling of making an entire world of your own, full of happiness or sorrow as you see please. Letting all your stress out into paragraph after paragraph, word after word, writing is an amazing feeling for the mind and soul...and I just could not agree more on this poem, I favorite it. It truly is a fantastic poem my friend.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013   General Artist
That's a wonderful comment, thank you :) and for the fave too!
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InvaderJD Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013  Student Writer
No problem at all, just keep up the good work ^^
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Eckis Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2013
Very good poem! Favorited! :)
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013   General Artist
yay, thank you! :)
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KanakoAoi Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2013
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Wow. Just wow. I actually signed into my account just to comment on this. It's an absolutely amazing poem. I can relate to this really easily I just- I'm saving this. It's too good not to keep. Phenomenal job!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013   General Artist
aww i am really glad you like it and i appreciate you taking time to comment aswell, it means alot :)
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Rhiannfleming Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2013
wow I love it!!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2013   General Artist
thank you! :)
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newcmv-x Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2013
I LOVE THIS, I FEEL THIS
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2013   General Artist
thank you :)
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TheArtributor Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Nicely put.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2013   General Artist
thanks :)
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