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They found my love hanging
By a rope from a tree
With a note in her pocket
That was addressed to me

The stains of her tears
On the ripped out blank page
Evidence to my eyes
Of an emotional pain

The last tears she would shed
The last anguish she'd feel
The deepest cut to her heart
This time would not heal

And nor did it need to
Her earthly shackles left behind
Time now has no meaning
And meaning now has no time

Unfolding the piece of paper
Even the fresh air suffocates
Scribbled down , hurried scrawl
'if you're reading this, you are too late'

I fall to the floor frantic
Clutch the note to my face
Trying to catch my loves essence
Before in the wind, it drifts away
just another old one :D

haha cheerful again lol
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Grnideladeee Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013
Wow
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013   General Artist
So many nice comments from you, thank you :)
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Vegetabelle Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Student General Artist
This captures a lot of feeling. You are so amazing.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012   General Artist
you're so nice Kerry. I really needed to hear some kind words, thank you :)
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Vegetabelle Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012  Student General Artist
Oh any time! And thank you!
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cee69 Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Student Writer
This made me cry....not many works, especially not poetry, can make me cry....
Last time I cried was when I read Under The Dome from Stephen King, which I finished about a week after it was released (so somewhere in 2009)....

Keep up the really good work, and please keep sharing them with us :D
~cee
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012   General Artist
thats really nice of you to say so :) thank you

its really special that something i wrote could touch you that much.I really appreciate you telling me :)
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cee69 Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012  Student Writer
no problem :D thanks for sharing such awesome work ^_^
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NykiiLynn Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
omg this is beautiful and depressing at the same time. you so just made me cry. good, great work.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012   General Artist
:) well i dont like to be responsible for your tears but its really special to me that it touched you

thank you for commenting :)
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DESTRUCTION-BUNNY Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
THIS IS A LOVELY PIECE OF LITREATURE!
Oky, with this said, I can calmy tell you that this is a wonderful, meaningful poem, and normally I don't ike reading poems (I is to unpatient) but this just....flowed so smoothly...
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2012   General Artist
lol I am exactly the same, being impatient.

Really glad you liked this though, thank you! :)
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DESTRUCTION-BUNNY Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It's awful sometimes, isn't it?

Welcome, it's one of the few good poems I read this week :)
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012   General Artist
yeah, lol my mind totally wanders when i read anything :D
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DariaGALLERY Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
oh, why she did this? soooo sad((((
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012   General Artist
just on this website unfortunately i hear alot of people who are depressed :( i wish i could help them all but i cant.

it seems alot of time it just because people dont have someone to talk to

you are being so nice to me today, Daria :) All these faves and comments :hug: so kind of you!
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DariaGALLERY Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
aww))):hug: my dear))) i just finally had a bit time to read all your poems))))
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DramaKitten Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012
so so beautiful [link]
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012   General Artist
thank you :)
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victor555 Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
thats amazing
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012   General Artist
thanks :)
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SkyeSteiner Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Student Writer
I was already engaging with the first part because it was brilliant and then what she wrote on the paper--oh gosh that really--I'm just so flabbergasted.
<----flabbergasted
And that's the first time I used a word like that this year :la:
Anyway, like I said, brilliant.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012   General Artist
aww I am glad to be the reason you used the word flabbergasted :D

i really appreciate your comment. I am glad you liked it so much! :)

thank you
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xandra127 Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
dark.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012   General Artist
:D thanks for reading and commenting
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xandra127 Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
po nrob~ :D
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extinguished-light Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow this is amazing
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012   General Artist
thank you :)
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LauraO1 Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Student General Artist
Wow that's really sad :(
But it's a really good poem <3
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012   General Artist
sad but good, I am happy with that. Thank you very much :)
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LauraO1 Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2012  Student General Artist
:iconnoproblemplz:
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StuckinaLabyrinth Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012
This is incredible!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012   General Artist
aww thanks! :)
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DSteffi Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Every word gave me chills. Awesome work as always. :D

--

All the effort is pointless if you don't believe in yourself.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012   General Artist
oh I am glad you enjoyed it, thank you :)
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janettehop Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012
i love it
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012   General Artist
thank you :)
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Stilltheman Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Ahhhh dude! N I C E !
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Stilltheman Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Dude! The wording is igniting reservoirs I didn't think I still had in me. Death! Pain! Anguish! Time! A blank page! Love! Essence! Shackles! A note in her pocket! Tears and so much more…
You're killing the juices out of every emotion here dude! iLike! iLike, very, very much! Inspired as per usual… Keep that pen flowing!
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Stilltheman Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Remember I said you're inspiring me… We'll I'm now more than ever determined to write poetry more often and or least post some of it here on DA. So thanks for being a shining example of consistency… I look forward to work every time - it's inspirational - always! ;-)
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012   General Artist
i loveeeeeeeee this comment :D

so much energy and passion and enthusiasm in it, and all for my poem

i am so very grateful for your kind words. thank you! :)
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jeciwoods17 Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I like this a lot..
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012   General Artist
thank you :)
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LoliMoetan Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012
Speechless.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012   General Artist
:) thank you for reading and commenting
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SecretlyFading Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012  Student Writer
A bit disturbing, but....wow, that got me in the heart and gut.

Great work :D
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012   General Artist
I am glad it touched you. Thanks for the comment :)
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SecretlyFading Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Student Writer
You're welcome
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LutscherDame Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
Amazing! touching! beautiful!
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