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They found my love hanging
By a rope from a tree
With a note in her pocket
That was addressed to me

The stains of her tears
On the ripped out blank page
Evidence to my eyes
Of an emotional pain

The last tears she would shed
The last anguish she'd feel
The deepest cut to her heart
This time would not heal

And nor did it need to
Her earthly shackles left behind
Time now has no meaning
And meaning now has no time

Unfolding the piece of paper
Even the fresh air suffocates
Scribbled down , hurried scrawl
'if you're reading this, you are too late'

I fall to the floor frantic
Clutch the note to my face
Trying to catch my loves essence
Before in the wind, it drifts away
just another old one :D

haha cheerful again lol
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Grnideladeee Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013
Wow
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013   General Artist
So many nice comments from you, thank you :)
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Vegetabelle Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Student General Artist
This captures a lot of feeling. You are so amazing.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012   General Artist
you're so nice Kerry. I really needed to hear some kind words, thank you :)
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Vegetabelle Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012  Student General Artist
Oh any time! And thank you!
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cee69 Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Student Writer
This made me cry....not many works, especially not poetry, can make me cry....
Last time I cried was when I read Under The Dome from Stephen King, which I finished about a week after it was released (so somewhere in 2009)....

Keep up the really good work, and please keep sharing them with us :D
~cee
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012   General Artist
thats really nice of you to say so :) thank you

its really special that something i wrote could touch you that much.I really appreciate you telling me :)
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cee69 Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012  Student Writer
no problem :D thanks for sharing such awesome work ^_^
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NykiiLynn Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
omg this is beautiful and depressing at the same time. you so just made me cry. good, great work.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012   General Artist
:) well i dont like to be responsible for your tears but its really special to me that it touched you

thank you for commenting :)
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