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I screamed at him "I'm leaving!"
He smiled and said "okay"
I said "no, for once I mean it
This time you wont make me stay"

But bags were never really packed
And that night in our bed I lay
The taste of blood on my lips
Still remained there the next day

I screamed at him "please stop this!
I am the Mother to your child
Baby, I know you have a temper
I know my ways make you so wild"

"But I promise I'll try harder
Not to push your buttons so much"
With that the beast resumed control
As I quiver at each stolen touch

They scream at me to leave him
To them it's such a simple choice
But it's been so long since I've heard
Anything but my master's voice

To the point that I no longer know
My own mind or my own heart
But today he said he's sorry again
And tomorrow will be a fresh start
xxxxxxx
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:iconnightlynxness:
nightlynxness Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013
Your words really have the power to touch people's hearts. Wonderfully written!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013   General Artist
that's really nice to hear and encouraging too. Makes me want to write more :)
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flippin-nuggets-25 Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
wow
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012   General Artist
:) thank you
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SereneCyrene Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Student General Artist
Your artwork has been featured here: [link] :)
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ThatOneGirl303 Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
That was amazing. Though I've never had this happen to e I've seen it play out and you have captured it most precisely. Great write.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012   General Artist
thanks so much and thank you for all the faves and for watching me too :)

I see that you are new, so welcome to dA :)
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ThatOneGirl303 Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Of course.
New account, old user.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012   General Artist
ah, welcome back then :)
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ThatOneGirl303 Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It's great to be back.
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iamPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Not a huge fan of rhyming, because most times it seems forced but....you have changed my mind a bit.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012   General Artist
I see it both ways really. I like the challenge of learning new words, or finding the right word that will fit my rhyming scheme. I always try to make sure I don't force it too. If I really cant find anything I will switch it around or change the word I am trying to rhyme with.

I wish I could write non-rhyming really. I perhaps strangely see that as more like proper poetry. I feel mine are more like song lyrics which is how I started writing.

thanks for the fave :)
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iamPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I don't think there is such a thing as proper poetry. I believe poetry is like beauty, it's in the eye of the beholder.

You're welcome.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012   General Artist
I am interested in your view point.

Do you believe in rules when it comes to poetry? Sometimes on my poems I get someone commenting who obviously has studied poetry giving me critique on things like meter. I always accept the comment and have no problem with it but my view is that poetry cant ever be wrong and that I shouldnt care about rules.

I would prefer people talk about how the words have touched them, or not.

I have the same issue with critics on anything though. Like i find it hard for someone to tell me i wouldnt like a movie, or album.

Maybe its a case of understanding the rules in order to be able to break/bend them.
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iamPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I used to write in fixed form. That's how I started. But I didn't feel free enough and I believe poetry is boundless and should not be restricted. It's to each their own language. For me, writing the life is poetic. The role of a poet/poetess is to present the view of what the world could be, in contrast to how it is already. There is such thing as bad poetry but I think bad poetry is worthy too. You have to be bad sometimes to become great.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012   General Artist
Its very interesting to me how people think there can be good and bad poetry. I tell people that actually so long as they are happy with what they have wrote and its from the heart and written to the best of their capabilities with what skills and experiences they have, then that is more than enough.

But i do believe that people can have an opinion on whether something is to their taste or not.

I like our discussions :)
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iamPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
But if it is for pure pleasure/release, it's all about the feelings. To be published, that's a whole other story.
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HaniaJedi Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You did a really good job with this poem!
Sadly, many can relate to this, but some people have the courage to leave.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012   General Artist
yeah, it is very sad how many can relate.

Thanks for reading and commenting :)
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HaniaJedi Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You're welcome! :)
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HourglassOfLostTime Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012
Amazing job!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012   General Artist
thank you! :)
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MySocksRock Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012
*sigh*

It's sad how many people can relate to this.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012   General Artist
yeah, I often think that too.
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DemonAngel-813 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Student General Artist
I can relate to this deeply. I was once a part of an abusive relationship, and it was truly difficult to tear myself away from it. This poem gives me a certain consolation I hadn't found over the years since I had left that part of my life.

Thank You.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012   General Artist
I am glad its something in the past for you :)

Having been in that situation it means alot that you approve of the poem and felt i handled the subject ok

thank you :)
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FeatherlynneXWarrior Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Student Writer
Nice!! Dark and powerful. Love it!!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012   General Artist
thank you! :)
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FeatherlynneXWarrior Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Student Writer
You're welcome!!
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Butterfly-Aria Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
very powerful words. very beautiful meaning. :hug:
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012   General Artist
thank you very much :hug:
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iluvcheeze2much Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Really well written :D Great job!!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012   General Artist
thanks! :D
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CupcakeyKitten Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
awwhhh ): i really like the way you wrote this
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012   General Artist
thank you, I am really glad to hear that :)
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Scootie-chan Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It's very deep, the meaning and words aren't still and motionless, they to well at moving this poem along with powerful emotions. Very beautiful~<3
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012   General Artist
:) thank you very much!
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Scootie-chan Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome~ ^ ^
You have an incredible voice~<3
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Kagehahen Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
Your poem is simple, and the iambic is slightly off, but its eloquent enough and topical, given the stories in the public's eye lately. And sometimes it's simple that gives the best eye view of a situation not easily understood. The point about others screaming for the voice to leave clashes nicely with their use of the word 'master' - its like wind blowing against a tree rooted to the dry ground - only when the ground has sucked the tree dry, all the wind will do it topple the wasted tree.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012   General Artist
thanks for taking time to comment on my poem, I appreciate your feedback
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KissTheSunrise Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
So true.. makes ya wonder why we do what we do. All in all, a lovely poem, nice ending. :D
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012   General Artist
thank you :) glad you enjoyed it
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KissTheSunrise Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
you're welcome, loved it! :heart:
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NoodlesAddict Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Powerful words with deep meanings. Sadness cries from every line.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012   General Artist
thank you for reading and commenting :)
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NoodlesAddict Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
you're very welcome :)
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Silkehmm Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012
Wauw this is very good!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012   General Artist
:D thank you!
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Silkehmm Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
You are welcome :aww:
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Alexa91198 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, extremely powerful, a lot of depth
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