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Life is an intravenous drip
With no transfusion of blood
Instead it slowly relieves me
Of a mind that once was good

Administering paranoia
Directly from the drip chamber
Suffocating me with terror
When there is no imminent danger

Life is an intravenous drip
I am fascinated by my veins
And curious as to which one
Carries the blood to my brain

Which causes the unwanted impulse
For me to question every answer
Tourniquet that varicose vessel
Curiosity is my cancer

Life is an intravenous drip
Of that I am A positive
My blood remains optimistic
So why am I so negative

I see no saline solution
Just diminishing vital signs
As my sanity transfuses from me
One deplorable drop at a time
7x
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Broken-Blues Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013
i think everyone starts of as a good innocent person but then things can change people, you written it really well here (:
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013   General Artist
:D thank you. Yep everyone starts innocent and then some go naughty ;) lol wink
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baglord-lordmindor Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013  Professional General Artist
it is sad to know that life is an intravenous drip - it would put the bags in a retributive consideration, taking into consideration that bags after all are living their lives on the edge, finding themselves wondering in vain whether there is an answer to resolving this problem.

There is one problem in this equation: I find myself pondering over whether to follow the Drag Bagerius approach which dictates:

Life is like an M&M wrapping - or at least melted rejected M&M wrapping with the M&Ms in a mess. I know, I've had far too many M&Ms when they melted, and it wasn't pretty when it reached that point.

or the Ryu Sack approach which dictates:

Life is full of surprises - a wise sack is one of them.

Since neither of them actually answers then question, I am wondering why they are unanimously accepted in answering what life is to begin with.

... I apologize, the bag side took over. My point is that, life... is not always as bad as an intravenous drip. The association with the intravenous drip itself implies a double edged sword - while the person is alive and is able to live some form of existence, there is always the peril of someone "pulling the plug". That is the biggest fear one can have when facing such a realization. Hence, the metaphors do help in understanding the darker side of the question (i.e. the fear).

Hence, the only answer is... open to suggestion.
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SaveAceOfSpades Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Gorgeous metaphors. I would love to hear how you were inspired to write this piece of art, and the meanings in it. I have my own ideas of what this meant, but I always love to hear the writers. :)
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2013   General Artist
hi :) yeah its always nice for me to hear what people think my poems are about and inspired by. In most cases they are usually exaggerated versions of things that have happened to me or someone i know.

I came up with the concept for this because my dad recently had a trip to hospital and was on an IV drip. As for content well I didnt plan for it being about suicide or cutting myself as someone else thought who commented. In my mind its more about how we all start life as innocent, pure babies and the things that happen to us bring us down and muddy the waters.

If you get chance i would love to hear your ideas on the meaning :)
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SaveAceOfSpades Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I hope your dad's over whatever he needed an IV for! :)

I never really got the suicide vibe from it. It was... Different? In some way. Didn't really sound suicidal to me.

We come in to this cruel world so sensitive and gentle. It's a shame we normally don't leave that way. Life hardens the best of us. Hell, sometimes it's what makes us the best. But I think we also forget how we started.

This felt almost like a reminder of the past for me. I'm sure everyone has different interpretations, but that's mine. A reminder of how far we've fallen.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2013   General Artist
yeah, he is getting better each day thankfully :)

I agree with what you say.

When I see some guy or girl who has done something terrible I always imagine how once they were just a little boy or a little girl. Everyone seems to just develop based on not only their situation but how they react to their situation.
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SaveAceOfSpades Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
So thankful for that!

Yes, it really is heartbreaking how some people are easily enough broken that they do horrible things. And sometimes it's to themselves, but often it's others. Even when I say mean things to someone else I often regret it. It's disgusting to me on how fast humans, including myself, lose themselves. Especially when we didn't come into here like that.
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travelgirlxx Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013
Hi! Just letting you know that your lovely piece has been featured here: [link]
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2013   General Artist
thats really kind of you, thank you. Some great pieces there :)
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travelgirlxx Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2013
Glad you enjoyed them! :heart:
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ofelialoov Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Awesome!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013   General Artist
thank you! :)
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Tarvitus Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013
Wow, awesome! :)
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013   General Artist
thanks! :)
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Tarvitus Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013
You're welcome :)
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mexicanpedo Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013
Graaah you poetic genius!

-Dzeni
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013   General Artist
:) you are going to make me blush lol. Thank you Dzeni :hug:
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pseudonym-blue Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013
This was really interesting, good job :)
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013   General Artist
thank you :)
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pseudonym-blue Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013
You're welcome :)
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UndertheShaydeWood Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013
I agree. Your metaphors are extremely unique and appropriae. The twisting and turning of imagery tells the whole story - very nicely done!!! (The very best compliment Captain Icad ever gives!)
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013   General Artist
thank you! It take that as a huge compliment :)
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UndertheShaydeWood Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013
My typing sucks, I meant Captain Picard. When he says, "Nicely done," you know you've made it in his books.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013   General Artist
:D ahhh now it makes sense. Good old Picard
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DevonEaton Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You always think of the strangest metaphors. I love it!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013   General Artist
:D i always worry when I write something too obvious lol

thank you, I am glad you liked it :)
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misery-business93 Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013
I really like this :) I think we've all been there at one point pr another and I hope that things sort themselves out for you soon :)
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013   General Artist
thats very kind of you to say so, thank you :)
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Sapphyre-Wynde Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Your imagery is brilliant, this is so fresh and new! It's fantastic :)
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013   General Artist
thank you very much :) I do try my best to be original
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TijonWolfsMajestys Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
I dont get suicide from this at all. I get the feeling you want to find something good but life is so...confusing, has too many empty paths to follow, empty drips, that you lose your way, you lose yourself in it to the point where you forget who you are and what you wanted.

XD i know im way off.

I think its beautiful nonetheless.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013   General Artist
You are very close infact to what I was trying to get across. Someone else thought it was about cutting themselves but I have no idea why. I suppose different people see things in different ways.

Thanks for your comment, I am glad you enjoyed it :)
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TijonWolfsMajestys Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Oh okay cool :D Yea i saw their comment it kinda freaked me out a bit :/

Youre welcome ^^
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ThatOneGirl303 Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Loved this one.
"Life is an intravenous drip
Of that I am A positive
My blood remains optimistic
So why am I so negative"
Can really connect with that. Keep up the good work.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013   General Artist
thank you! :) Glad you liked it :hug:
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jjm239 Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Not bad. The anatomical accuracy behind your poetic depression is alluring and refreshing, but the subject matter is so-so. It's clearly saying, "I cut myself to see how much it bleeds." In fact, I stole that line from Eminem's song "Stan". Life is an IV drip, for sure, yet your poem is no panacea.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013   General Artist
If you understood the title (which I assume from the last part of your comment you did) I dont know why you thought this had anything to do with cutting.

but anyway thanks for reading and taking time to comment, I appreciate it.
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jjm239 Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Looking for the source of one's life force usually refers to the act of cutting for means to the end known as suicide. That or your life is lackluster and losing interest.
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Adam-2-Angelz Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Student Artisan Crafter
That's the way I feel like right now... :(
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013   General Artist
:( sorry to hear that :hug:
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Adam-2-Angelz Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Student Artisan Crafter
I feel better now! :heart:
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Everlasting90 Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Very truthful piece that reflects our confusing psyches. I've been there!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013   General Artist
thank you for reading this and commenting :)
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BennyPebbles Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013
:huggle:
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013   General Artist
:) :hug:
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