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Life is an intravenous drip
With no transfusion of blood
Instead it slowly relieves me
Of a mind that once was good

Administering paranoia
Directly from the drip chamber
Suffocating me with terror
When there is no imminent danger

Life is an intravenous drip
I am fascinated by my veins
And curious as to which one
Carries the blood to my brain

Which causes the unwanted impulse
For me to question every answer
Tourniquet that varicose vessel
Curiosity is my cancer

Life is an intravenous drip
Of that I am A positive
My blood remains optimistic
So why am I so negative

I see no saline solution
Just diminishing vital signs
As my sanity transfuses from me
One deplorable drop at a time
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Broken-Blues Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013
i think everyone starts of as a good innocent person but then things can change people, you written it really well here (:
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013   General Artist
:D thank you. Yep everyone starts innocent and then some go naughty ;) lol wink
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baglord-lordmindor Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013  Professional General Artist
it is sad to know that life is an intravenous drip - it would put the bags in a retributive consideration, taking into consideration that bags after all are living their lives on the edge, finding themselves wondering in vain whether there is an answer to resolving this problem.

There is one problem in this equation: I find myself pondering over whether to follow the Drag Bagerius approach which dictates:

Life is like an M&M wrapping - or at least melted rejected M&M wrapping with the M&Ms in a mess. I know, I've had far too many M&Ms when they melted, and it wasn't pretty when it reached that point.

or the Ryu Sack approach which dictates:

Life is full of surprises - a wise sack is one of them.

Since neither of them actually answers then question, I am wondering why they are unanimously accepted in answering what life is to begin with.

... I apologize, the bag side took over. My point is that, life... is not always as bad as an intravenous drip. The association with the intravenous drip itself implies a double edged sword - while the person is alive and is able to live some form of existence, there is always the peril of someone "pulling the plug". That is the biggest fear one can have when facing such a realization. Hence, the metaphors do help in understanding the darker side of the question (i.e. the fear).

Hence, the only answer is... open to suggestion.
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SaveAceOfSpades Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Gorgeous metaphors. I would love to hear how you were inspired to write this piece of art, and the meanings in it. I have my own ideas of what this meant, but I always love to hear the writers. :)
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2013   General Artist
hi :) yeah its always nice for me to hear what people think my poems are about and inspired by. In most cases they are usually exaggerated versions of things that have happened to me or someone i know.

I came up with the concept for this because my dad recently had a trip to hospital and was on an IV drip. As for content well I didnt plan for it being about suicide or cutting myself as someone else thought who commented. In my mind its more about how we all start life as innocent, pure babies and the things that happen to us bring us down and muddy the waters.

If you get chance i would love to hear your ideas on the meaning :)
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SaveAceOfSpades Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I hope your dad's over whatever he needed an IV for! :)

I never really got the suicide vibe from it. It was... Different? In some way. Didn't really sound suicidal to me.

We come in to this cruel world so sensitive and gentle. It's a shame we normally don't leave that way. Life hardens the best of us. Hell, sometimes it's what makes us the best. But I think we also forget how we started.

This felt almost like a reminder of the past for me. I'm sure everyone has different interpretations, but that's mine. A reminder of how far we've fallen.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2013   General Artist
yeah, he is getting better each day thankfully :)

I agree with what you say.

When I see some guy or girl who has done something terrible I always imagine how once they were just a little boy or a little girl. Everyone seems to just develop based on not only their situation but how they react to their situation.
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SaveAceOfSpades Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
So thankful for that!

Yes, it really is heartbreaking how some people are easily enough broken that they do horrible things. And sometimes it's to themselves, but often it's others. Even when I say mean things to someone else I often regret it. It's disgusting to me on how fast humans, including myself, lose themselves. Especially when we didn't come into here like that.
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travelgirlxx Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013
Hi! Just letting you know that your lovely piece has been featured here: [link]
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2013   General Artist
thats really kind of you, thank you. Some great pieces there :)
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