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I hold the guitar against me
But I'm afraid it just wont do
No notes that I play could compare
To the symphony that is you

So who is the orchestrator
Of this harmonic elegance
The beauty of which sustains me
With such a lasting resonance

Angels, please sing us a chorus
And paint the clouds so silver lined
May she always dream in colour
And may I always speak in rhyme
One single whispered word from her
Always seems to eclipse my pain
With belief, hope and destiny
Forever in love, I remain


I hold the paintbrush in my hand
Until creative thoughts will cease
But no strokes could ever come close
To your beautiful masterpiece

Each colour is so delicate
So rare and so understated
From a birth and a blank canvas
To potential God created

Angels, please sing us a chorus
And paint the clouds so silver lined
May she always dream in colour
And may I always speak in rhyme
One single whispered word from her
Always seems to eclipse my pain
With belief, hope and destiny
Forever in love, we remain
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NykiiLynn Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
i was singing this as i read it. very beautiful.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012   General Artist
thats reall cool to hear as i did do some music for it too :)
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DariaGALLERY Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
awwwwwwwwwwwwww))))) so nice so nice)))))))))))))
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012   General Artist
:) thank you, glad you like it :hug:
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DariaGALLERY Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
:huggle: meow)
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nightlynxness Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012
Beautifully in love with this!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012   General Artist
:) thank you very much!
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Vegetabelle Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2012  Student General Artist
One day, I hope I have a boyfriend as sweet as you. Bee is a lucky girl. :iconbigeyesplz: This is an adorable poem. So well written!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2012   General Artist
i am working on some music for this too :)

thanks for the comment!
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Vegetabelle Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2012  Student General Artist
AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW! cool! You're welcome!
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wookiepoetry Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012
So you may not remember me, but a few months ago i read a bunch of your poetry and such and was seriously impressed. I left a few very positive comments then left and didnt get back online until now. My friend's recommendation to come to this website and your poetry are what first piqued my interest in the arts and i want to thank you for showing me this beautiful world of creative writing. You have a gift sir.

Now that that mushy shit is done with, this is an amazing poem. Took my breath away, a song version would be just amazing.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012   General Artist
:) thanks very much. It makes it all worth while really uploading in the first place.

infact its beyond belief to think i could inspire or anything. Its just so new to me

it might become a song one day :)
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maria-ber0312 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012
It's lovely :)
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012   General Artist
:) thank you
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Toto-bear Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012
You made me forgot how to breathe. I inhaled and almost forgot to exhale by the end of the poem. It is beyond exceptional. Bravo!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012   General Artist
aww thank you. Such a nice comment :)
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LilyHitori Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
BEAUTIFUL!!!!!! I love it! :)
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012   General Artist
thank you! :)
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cupcakekitten20 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012
love this!!!! love this so much!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012   General Artist
yay! i appreciate it, thank you :)
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Alakittynya Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow! such a beautiful poem :) It could itself be turned into a song~ :heart:
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012   General Artist
i think i am gonna turn it into a song too

thanks for the comment!
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Alakittynya Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
AWESOME!!! :la: link to me if ya do please :meow: youre welcome :)
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012   General Artist
yeah, i will probably put it in a journal :)
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kedonsine Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Awww. This Is Bee-You-Tee-Full
As Usual. :Heart:
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012   General Artist
thank youuuuuuu :)
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kedonsine Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're Welcome
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Derniera Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
this is absolutely amazing! :) love it. how do you just know how to say what everyone thinks in these special moments? :)
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012   General Artist
aww such kind words :)

When it comes to Bee i just write from the heart :)
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SofiaSevero Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
this is absolutly beutiful. i have no words to describe how amazed i am
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012   General Artist
:) thank you for a lovely comment. I am really glad you liked it :)
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VisionsToPonder Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is one of the most beautiful things I've ever read. You have a skill for writing, sir. Please keep it up!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012   General Artist
aww thanks for saying that. Boosts my confidence :)
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VisionsToPonder Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You deserve it. I love poetry and I only love it if it's good.
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theresahelmer Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2012  Professional Photographer
Beautiful
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012   General Artist
thank you :)
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012   General Artist
aww thank you :)
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FiyeroTigelaar Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Absolutely beautiful! That is al that needs to be said.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012   General Artist
thats more than enough, thank you so much :)
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FiyeroTigelaar Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You are very welcome :)
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RainySkyz Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2012   Writer
This is SO beautiful! :heart:

And Love is so fabulous when it's really Love... because it writes poems just like this. Deservedly, but definitely written by Love.
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NekoNinja13 Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2012
wonderful
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012   General Artist
thank you :)
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High-Guard Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
MRAWR. Do like!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012   General Artist
yay! thank you! :)
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High-Guard Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It spoke to me in dark places... amazing stuff.

Piece of advice though: NEVER EVER EVER do long distance relationships.
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