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I was the boy who remained silent
Through those weeks, months and years
Watching the tide begin to rise
From all of your fallen tears

A tide of insecurity
That in time became so deep
It would set about draining you
Of all the secrets that you keep

I was the boy who remained mute
I watched your life unfold from above
As you were shattered with pain
And given false hope with love

So many times I was tempted
To come and heal my angels pain
But up above in the blue sky
For now at least I would remain

I was the boy who stayed silent
A hush so deafeningly loud
You were never alone though
Princess, I was on a cloud

I watched as all of these things
Came to pass down below
And why didn't I intervene?
I had faith that alone you would grow
x x x x x x x
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:iconkikumizu:
KikuMizu Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2013
Seems as though he is the angel or someone who had passed away, perhaps?
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2013   General Artist
You are definitely on the right lines :)

thank you for commenting!
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:iconkikumizu:
KikuMizu Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2013
Well I read it entirely so I have adopted the policy I should at least say something about it :)
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EnlightenedEnigma Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
*siiiiiiighhhhhhhhh* <33333
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013   General Artist
awww glad you liked it :hug:
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:icongrnideladeee:
Grnideladeee Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013
So deeeep
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013   General Artist
thank you :)
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:iconvegetabelle:
Vegetabelle Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Student General Artist
This is so sweet and sad at the same time.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012   General Artist
thanks Kerry :)
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:iconvegetabelle:
Vegetabelle Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012  Student General Artist
You are so welcome!
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:icondanikamilles:
DanikaMilles Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
This is so sweet and well written. Great job!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012   General Artist
thank you!

glad you liked it :)
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:icondanikamilles:
DanikaMilles Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
You're welcome

:D
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:iconbroken-blues:
Broken-Blues Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012
this puts a strange but good feeling in my tummy (:
i can't really describe it but you should know it...
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012   General Artist
glad it put a good feeling in your tummy and your belly :D

i understand what you mean totally :)

thanks for the comment and fave!
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:iconvictor555:
victor555 Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
WOW
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012   General Artist
thank you :D
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:iconfantasy-warriorx:
Fantasy-WarriorX Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I think you forgot to put a space between "atleast". Wonderful job with this poem anways:)
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2012   General Artist
:) thank you for the comment and I have changed the "atleast" to "at least"
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:iconfantasy-warriorx:
Fantasy-WarriorX Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
No problem :)
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:iconsilveracecard:
Silveracecard Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
As soon as I read "I was on a cloud" I thought "And then the aliens attacked."
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2012   General Artist
lol thanks for reading and commenting :D
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:iconkedonsine:
kedonsine Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I Wish I Could Write Like This
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2012   General Artist
thats really flattering. I am sure you can write and have your own style. So long as you are true to yourself when writing, i think thats all that matters :)
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:iconzwecat:
zwecat Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2012   Digital Artist
I adore this.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2012   General Artist
:) thank you
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SkyeSteiner Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2012  Student Writer
No words to explain how much I :heart: this poem
but...
:iconsobeautifulplz: D'awww I just asdfghjkl;
It's just soooooooo :icononionx3plz::iconexcitedblushplz:
*ahem* excuse me... :D
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2012   General Artist
aww that excited blush was my favourite one lol

thanks so much for the comment :)
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:iconrhi-raven97:
Rhi-Raven97 Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
any one else find this incredibly sweet and romantic in a poetic, inverted way?
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2012   General Artist
very kind of you to say this :)

thanks for reading and commenting
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:iconrhi-raven97:
Rhi-Raven97 Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
haha no problem ;)
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guitarangel1495 Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012
gives me the chills its so lovely. cant help but wonder what happens to her, cant help but think its gonna b some sort of concrete angel story, actually i was playing that video in my mind as i read it. that song never looses its effect no matter how many times i hear it
:floating:
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2012   General Artist
aww thank you very much for the comment. Glad you liked it! :)
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:iconalexias-ashley:
Alexias-Ashley Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
amazing
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2012   General Artist
thanks :)
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:iconshizukacho:
ShizukaCho Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012
This really is beautiful! Great work!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2012   General Artist
thank you, i really appreciate it :)
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:iconsierraw11:
SierraW11 Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
New favorite poem. As a writer, I'm deeply inspired by this... You have a beautiful gift!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2012   General Artist
thats very very kind of you and I am really flattered :)

glad you liked it and thanks for commenting!
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:iconstarell:
starell Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012
This is so hauntingly beautiful!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012   General Artist
thank you so much! :)
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:iconstarell:
starell Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012
you are most welcome!
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:iconsvitavotara:
Svitavotara Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012
Stunning *O*
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012   General Artist
thanks! :D
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:iconfalsewarrior:
falsewarrior Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
There are only two types of people in this world: talkers and listeners.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012   General Artist
very true :) thank you for reading and commenting
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bunocerous Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
.....you leave me speechless.
well, almost XD
Again, you have great mastery with syllable flow, and the rhyming pattern isn't awkward and enhances the feel of the poem.
And you portray the view of the narrator (who I am assuming is God) with grace. Even though he is silent, you can feel the love and wisdom shining through.
This is amazingly good.
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