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I skilfully avoid all of the questions
About my fragile state of mind
I wonder how anyone could locate me
When I was never here to find

Maybe I only exist in conversations
Filled with the conceit of hindsight
But it’s too late to drop the gun to the table
With the bullets already in flight

I skilfully avoid feelings of happiness
It seems more of an effort to smile
A shadow was permanently cast over me
Just like the face of a sundial

Maybe I only exist as a silhouette
A vague outline that’s lost in time
Is it too late for me to turn away from my woes
And show my face to the sunshine?
realityisfarlessexciting
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Themoonofmyheart Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
NO it isn't late for you and you've got everything in your hands. maybe you have been disappointed by many around you. well you aren't alone. we all have been through this. it is not because people disappoint us but because they fail to express their true selves and we in return fail to understand their true selves :) you are completely fine. this is your learning phase and you will come out only stronger :hug:
Qita
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013   General Artist
Such a kind message. I thank you very much.

Your message makes a lot of sense.

Nice to meet you Qita, i like that name :)
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Themoonofmyheart Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
That's my nick :D. Nice to know you as well :rose: you've got an honest heart that's so want to come out from the regular crowd :)
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DevonEaton Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love that second verse.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013   General Artist
really glad you liked it :) thank you
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ThrivingEbe Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2013
'It seems more of an effort to smile' that was me yesterday (:
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Dragoneer99 Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2013  Student Writer
I always like things like this.

I myself suffer from anxiety, and thus depression.

Things like this tell me someone can understand.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2013   General Artist
and it is good for me to hear a comment like that too. Knowing I am not alone in those feelings :)

thank you for the comment
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MySocksRock Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013
:heart:
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013   General Artist
:heart: thank  you :hug:
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wolf-in-a-dress Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is really interesting.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013   General Artist
thank you :)
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wolf-in-a-dress Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You're welcome!
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BlackSilhoutte Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
A good work.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013   General Artist
thank you :)
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SEwing0109 Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Good job. I know that this is to improve our art, but I have nothing negative to say. Are you writing this as an introvert?
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013   General Artist
I am never quite sure if i am an introvert or an extrovert. I dont say a lot to people but that is out of choice. It isn't like i feel nervous of speaking out. Maybe I am somewhere in the middle :)

But having said that I usually write from someone elses point of view anyway and maybe this person is an introvert. I would think so :)

thanks for the comment and taking an interest :)
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SEwing0109 Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks for writing something interesting.
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DarkZero2109 Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
That's it, you're officially going on my watch list. Your writing is amazing, period.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013   General Artist
:) thanks so much for that! Really glad you like what I write
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DarkZero2109 Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Heh, no problem at all!
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EnlightenedEnigma Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Yet another beautifully well written out poem. The way you can describe and put into words feelings that seem foreign to us is beyond me. Well done :)
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013   General Artist
:) thank you again. You are always so supportive of my writing and it means a lot
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EnlightenedEnigma Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Of course I LOVE your writing!! It's my eye candy :) 
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KandyKitty101 Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This was beautifully written, you can convey emotions very well.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013   General Artist
thank you very much :)
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KandyKitty101 Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem!
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MissStory Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Student General Artist
Reality is far less exciting, very true.
I like this poem. In a sense many of us feel we are nonexistent.
I felt similar to what you've described in this poem, more in middle school. And still somewhat now, in a sense.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013   General Artist
hey :) thank you for your comment and telling me how it related to you. I appreciate it.
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