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I’ll indite my crude and clumsy rhymes
From my place in the pitch dark
And will wait all night if needs must
For that one creative spark

That will manifest thoughts in my mind
Into a charged lightning bolt
Strike my memories, open my wounds
And let writing be my salt

So cut me and see the metaphors
Floating around my blood stream
Pour salt on the literal lesions
To punctuate my primal scream

As painful at first as the memory
But after the initial sting
Wounds will heel, leaving only scars
Numbness replaces everything

This lack of feeling is temporary
As a writer I live for the pain
Of opening up new abrasions
To keep me lucid and sane

Deviant words in dank surroundings
Disturbed thoughts I can not waste
I apologise in retrospect
But I was in such a bad place
7x
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:iconwickedsoulsbook:
wickedsoulsbook Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013  Student Writer
I love it!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013   General Artist
thank you! :)
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ConvictionbyLarm Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013  Student General Artist
A wonderful poem about the love to write… I really marvel about your talent to write these things :)
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013   General Artist
Thank you so much :) It's really nice of you to take time to fave and comment so kindly :)
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ConvictionbyLarm Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013  Student General Artist
I love to read your poetry. I keep them to read them and I want to take time to read them, and some parts i write down in my dairy like a magic word or a whisper-wisdom-word for the day :)
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013   General Artist
that's so good to hear :) The last part of your comment reminded me of a Beatles song. A quote from which I have on my wall :) [link]
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:iconkedonsine:
kedonsine Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Bee-you-tea-ful as usual.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2013   General Artist
thank you! :)
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nightlynxness Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2013
Oh, woe is an artist/writer with a block. One of our greatest fears ever.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2013   General Artist
yeah, it really is. I usually end up writing about writers block when I am experiencing it lol.

thanks for the comment! :)
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fireleap Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2013
Very... sorrowful and just... it feels so real. Absolutely brilliant work!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2013   General Artist
:) that's so very kind of you, thank you.
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poeknowsprose Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2013
Very sad, but very good description of how it feels to have writers block. Good piece, and well said.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2013   General Artist
thank you :)
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SKETCH-FAGGOT Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2013  Student General Artist
Very nice.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2013   General Artist
thank you :)
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2013  Student General Artist
you are a wonderful human being and I just wanted to remind you in case you ever forget. Have a nice day Col c:
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2013   General Artist
aww thank you Soph, so are you. I am hoping you remember me when you are rich and famous and a huge success at whichever career path you take :)
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2013  Student General Artist
Haha I don't think I'd ever strike it rich one day but I always remember my friends so don't ya worry col c:
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2013   General Artist
once you realise that you are capable of doing anything you want to, the world better watch out :)
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2013  Student General Artist
That's the hard part but nothing in life is easy I guess, so might as well try, right? C:
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2013   General Artist
that is a great way of looking at it :)
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2013  Student General Artist
thanks c:
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destiney16 Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2013
so amazing yet its sad because i feel something like that now....
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2013   General Artist
thank you so much for the comment, I appreciate it :)
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deathbyskyrim Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
beautiful and strong
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2013   General Artist
thank you :)
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RustyCrayons Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
"To punctuate my primal scream" This... wow. Incredible. This needs to be put to a song, it belongs in MCR
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2013   General Artist
thank you! Glad you liked it :)
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BreatheAlive Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013
This is fantastic! I like the word choice and the poem's overall air of brooding pensiveness. :)
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2013   General Artist
thanks! Really happy that you like it :)
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BreatheAlive Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2013
You're welcome. :)
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omarkaviles Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013
I love your choice of words! very inspiring!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2013   General Artist
That is great to hear, thank you :)
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Mischievous-Eyes Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013   General Artist
This is awesome! I love it! :heart:
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013   General Artist
thank you! :)
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Dude, this is dope. Love it. :)
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013   General Artist
Thanks man, I appreciate it :)
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome. :)
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dkenreeks Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Professional Writer
Good description of writer's block.
I know the feeling...sometimes, I stare at the page I wish to compose on, hoping that my Muse will show up and flip on the "create" switch!
Like it.
--RKJ
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013   General Artist
Yeah, it often gets to the point that the only thing I can find to write about is my writers block lol

Glad you liked it, thank you. :)
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