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The crack became a crevice
The crevice became a hole
Invited my mortal remains
To part company with my soul

God has given me these hands
To create beautiful art
It's not for me to say when
This earthly plane I shall depart

The tears became a torrent
The torrent became a flood
I was drowning in sorrow
I sought the buoyancy of good

God has given me these thoughts
To stimulate and inspire
With rhetorical reasoning
Until my bones can retire

The thought became a feeling
The feeling became the truth
Faith alone was now enough
Beyond the search for proof

God has given me this mind
So who am I to question
When He has granted me free will
To follow my own direction
xxxxxxx
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GeorgieSummers Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Aah, I don't want to repeat myself lol, but everything you write is so beautiful :') I just... Yeah. (<-- Very insightful, I'm sure)
I love the first verse. And the way your poems change from sad/depressed to happy and positive at the end.
And again, the religious theme xD

Oh, and I'm raiding your gallery lol, sorry for spamming you with favs! x'D
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2014   General Artist
xD raiding my gallery. Maybe i need a security guard lol

Glad you like what i write. Have a great evening! :)
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GeorgieSummers Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Or maybe a spam bot to filter my ramblings and fav-spams lol

And I'm glad you write these things, I really enjoy reading them xD
And have a good... morning? Day? Depends on time zones and when you read this message and stuff I guess.
Have a good 24 hours, whatever way the daylight falls! xD
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2014   General Artist
haha you know i used to thank everyone for every single fave and it got to the point where dA would actually block me with a spam bot xD it picked up on me saying the same words many times. Mostly ''thank you for the fave''  lol Since then i just reply to comments and hope people dont think i am rude.

Well its 2.38pm here now but that probably wont help much unless you read this message right now lol

Yeah, its safest just to say ''have a good day!'' cover all bases lol
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GeorgieSummers Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Pfft wow, that could happen to me soon. Although I probably don't post art often enough for it to get to that point lol

15 minutes ago soon enough? Guess we're in the same time zone, it's nearly 3pm over here

Lol yeah xD
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2014   General Artist
oh i thought you were in USA for some reason lol

I just had a look and you are in the UK like me :) Same time zone so no more confusion lol

I often think about changing my own personal time zone though just so i can avoid busy shops and buses etc :D
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GeorgieSummers Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Lol yeah, a lot of people on here are in the US lol

You mean so that when everyone else is waking up at 8/9, you move your schedule behind by a few hours?
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014   General Artist
lol yeah. Maybe just two hours. So i can avoid traffic in the morning etc.

I used to work nights. So i would start work at 10pm and finish at 6am. 

Yeah, its always a nice surprise meeting someone from the UK here :)
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CorinaTanase Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
I am glad to see you are grateful to God for your talent!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012   General Artist
:) thank you for taking time to read this and comment
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Svitavotara Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012
So deep and wonderful. Very awesome!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012   General Artist
thank you so much :)
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Svitavotara Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012
You're most welcome :meow:
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alittlebitoffaith Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012
I'm glad there's a positive side of the emotion god promises to take away pain he will give us positive happy inspiration and a everlasting life to look forward to
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012   General Artist
a beautiful comment, thank you :)
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alittlebitoffaith Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012
Your welcome but it is actually true :) god does promise that one day we can live on a paradise earth
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Acedead Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012
Nice! Really like it!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012   General Artist
thank you! :)
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pinkyaliya Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Student General Artist
This is nice
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012   General Artist
thank you so much :)
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Gwillis Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Perfect timing as always my friend with the poems! i just finished studying Paradise Lost in my English class and this brings me back to it! Smooth Musings my friend!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012   General Artist
:)glad you enjoyed this and to even have Paradise Lost mentioned on my comments page is immense :D

thank you!
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Gwillis Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
As always friend!
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bunocerous Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I love this XD
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012   General Artist
thank you! and thanks for faving :)
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bunocerous Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome, thanks for good work
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Junk-Romantic Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Student Writer
This is brilliant! I love the rhyme scheme you've used and the emotion in it. Well done :)
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012   General Artist
Thank you so very much. Glad you enjoyed it! :)
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