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Put down all of your books
Open your troubled mind
Leave the cell-like classroom
And feel the warm sunshine

Beating down from above
On your beautiful skin
Forget all you have learnt
Let your journey begin

Breathe the air on green hills
Open eyes to blue sky
They tried to hide the truth
But with no alibi

Are you just a product
Of wistful memories
Or is there still some time
To change your destiny

Tether your torrid thoughts
Silence those languid words
That pollute your young mind
Instead choose to observe

The beauty that surrounds
Nature is your mother
Wisdom is your father
Creation your lover

The world outside your door
Can be a hollow place
Dividing us through fear
Of religion and race

Why not come together
As beyond our skin
We can live forever
Through our beauty within

Move forward with one love
Your untouchable soul
For once in your life, friend
Free your mind, lose control
Please Lose Control
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killzonekrissy Featured By Owner May 25, 2014
absolutely perfect! I really needed to hear this right now! you're an amazing writer!! I am completely inspired. :)
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner May 26, 2014   General Artist
aww I am glad if it helped you. Thank you! :)
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vampiress-chic7 Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Best thing ive read so far tonight. Beautiful!!!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2012   General Artist
thats so kind of you, thank you! :)
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vampiress-chic7 Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem :) your welcome
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LadyXaim Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012  Student Writer
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This place fits this poem so much. I recommend that you try it.....
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012   General Artist
that was so lovely thank you :) it made me think alot and i am gonna share it with some friends of mine who i think could take a time out every now and then :)
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LadyXaim Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012  Student Writer
No probem and yaaaaay spread the word ^^
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LightOverpowers58 Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you for writing this! :hug: I tell my friends this constantly but never follow my own advice...gorgeous poem, my friend!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012   General Artist
lol yeah, thats exactly the same as me. I advise people on all sorts of situations i really fail at lol

thanks for the comment :)
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LightOverpowers58 Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012  Student Writer
Ha, thank you for relating ^_^ and you are welcome for the comment, it was the least I could do!
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SkyeSteiner Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Student Writer
Just when I thought I never felt stress like this =))) Got to get ready for those College Entrance Exams :steaming: Thanks btw
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012   General Artist
Just close your eyes and take deep breaths. Well before you start anyway. It probably wouldnt help to do that through the whole exam lol

thank you :)
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EatenRibs Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Exactly ^^
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2012   General Artist
:D thanks for reading and commenting
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SapphireSoul102 Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
this is a beautiful poem :love:
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012   General Artist
thank you so much :)
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SapphireSoul102 Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
you're welcome :D
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Tinkerbellluv Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2012
this is Beautiful! <3
Souljacol you always blow my mind with the things you write. :) i love it all. <3
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012   General Artist
aww you are always very kind and it keeps me wanting to write and upload on dA :)
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Tinkerbellluv Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012
that's good to hear. :)
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selena-lenoir Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2012
Absolutely love the message in this. Well done. :)
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2012   General Artist
thank you very much :)
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Mercen-X Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2012
A moving sentiment
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2012   General Artist
thank you :)
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alivethroughart Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
a receptive mind means an open heart :heart::hug: lovely words
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2012   General Artist
yep, I agree Judy. Thank you so much for your comment :)
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starmic Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2012
do you read minds?
this is awsome!!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2012   General Artist
lol maybe i do :D

thank you very much for the comments :)
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starmic Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2012
hehe our mind reader
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starmic Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2012
wow
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inchoatie Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2012  Student Photographer
Touching. I love it.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2012   General Artist
thank you so much. very kind of you :)
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thelonelyhearts7486 Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2012
beautiful
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2012   General Artist
thank you :)
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thelonelyhearts7486 Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2012
your velcome!
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TheProtectorofTime Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I have already lost my control to my insanity....hehehe
Well, not that crazy...yet.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2012   General Artist
or maybe we are all born crazy and those that we think grow up to be crazy are actually the sane ones lol

thanks for commenting :)
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TheProtectorofTime Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Valid point my friend!
You're welcome
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ReneaShocknugget Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2012
Beautiful <3
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2012   General Artist
thank you :)
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ReneaShocknugget Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2012
It is no problem :D As I read on I felt as though I was connecting with each word. Speaks the truth (:
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AdrianosArt Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Perfect.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2012   General Artist
thank you, I am glad you think so :)
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AdrianosArt Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2012  Student Digital Artist
You are very welcome.
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Narcaholic Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2012  Student
Inspiring work (:
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2012   General Artist
thats so nice to hear. I would love to write something that could inspire someone in any way :)
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
A nice piece. It has a good flow and no rhyme seems too forced.
It has a good message too.
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