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My worries are a reservoir
Her worries are a lake
In that they’re very real indeed
Whereas mine are very fake

Invented to seek attention
Lies, oh despicable lies
One day I’ll drown in metaphors
Please be sure to sympathise

But while you show me this concern
Who'll be looking out for her
Blood curdling screams from my mouth
She is nil by mouth and verse

I have cried wolf so many times
She can’t even cry her own tears
My lies are spun in silk cobwebs
My spinneret shrouding your ears

I spoon fed you daily doses
So it was easier to digest
I planted those seeds of sorrow
Your fertile mind did the rest

Lies, all those despicable lies
What ever could be more obscene
Perhaps a girl that no one heard
Who was found dead at age sixteen
hello. this poem isnt't about me or specifically anyone I know. Just an observation of people in general :)
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ryolo132 Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013
I love just reading this!
I noticed recently how it starts off talking about the girl, but then it drags you away from her, almost doesn't mention her near the end, as if she's just forgotten and then BOOM it hits you like a tree.
Fantasmic.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013   General Artist
:)yeah, I am glad you said that as it was the affect i was trying to achieve.

thank you for your comment :)
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Broken-Blues Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013
amazing, i really loved this one, especially the metaphors
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013   General Artist
:) thank you! :iconluvluvplz:
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waiting-for-wings Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
wow this is amazing
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013   General Artist
thank you :)
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ofelialoov Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is very touching... And amazing. Great work!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013   General Artist
glad you like it, thank you :)
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MagicalJoey Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013   Writer
It's a very true observation.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013   General Artist
thanks for reading and commenting on this :)
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