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To those daydreamers amongst us
Tomorrow will soon be today
So choose every word carefully
As they might be the last you say

And they will echo through time
After your final shadow is cast
But those words and those emotions
Will have no place in the past

They'll take their place in tomorrow
And every day to the end of time
Your words, your thoughts and your wisdom
Will deviate us from straight lines

And show people there's another way
Peace and love can re-wire our brains
Show us how to avoid hatred
And from negative feelings refrain

Otherwise I can see suffering
But on an unheard of scale
Nations and religions will collide
Peace treaties will continue to fail

So daydreamers amongst us
Please unleash your wildest thoughts
Drop your line into the sea of wisdom
And show us what you have caught
xxxxxxx
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SleepyDayDreamerzzzz Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I love it :)
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2014   General Artist
thank you  :)
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SleepyDayDreamerzzzz Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Your welcome :)
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MidnightDarkest Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Awesome! I need to try to write like that!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012   General Artist
aww, thank you :)
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AdrianosArt Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Superb!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012   General Artist
thank you! :)
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AdrianosArt Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Student Digital Artist
You're quite welcome! =D
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NewEmma Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow ! Now I wanna be a daydreamer too ! Haha !!! Very well written Colin ! :)
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012   General Artist
haha thank you Jenny :) Its not always possible to be able to daydream with our busy lives :D
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NewEmma Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're welcome and yes yes it is possible! You have to put your life on hold for a few minutes though ! :D
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CuddleSlut17 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is beautiful. The last two lines made my imagery wonder. I hope by the time I'm your age, I can write this deep. Your work is inspiring to me. Great job colon. Thanks for sharing.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012   General Artist
thats really very kind of you to say :) It means the world to me if people like something I have wrote and even more so if they feel inspired :) thank you
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CuddleSlut17 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
When I read something, I try to take the time to really find the meaning behind it at least from my Point of view. So I usually leave a detailed comment. All I can say is wow most of the time. Your very welcome. :)
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DevonEaton Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'll admit that by the end my mind had started wandering, but those last two lines really reeled me back in (yes that was intentional :P). Great poem and strong finish!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012   General Artist
lol 'reeled in' :D

haha my mind hand started to wander a little too in the middle of writing it

thanks for your comment! :)
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KuraiTenshiV Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2012  Hobbyist
completely Awsome
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012   General Artist
:) thanks so much
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KuraiTenshiV Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist
Np I'm glad you posted it.
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