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Everywhere I go I see her face
I never got to touch her soft skin
Tell me how can I mourn the ending
When we were yet to even begin

And please don't you tell me to move on
You really think that I'm not trying?
In truth all that I want right now
Is to get through a day without crying
a short poem from along time ago.....
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Windowsill7 Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013
Beautifully written. Short and to the point in a great way ^^ Hope you're feeling better now though :)
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013   General Artist
thank you. It's a difficult situation but then again alot of people go through difficult situations :)
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Windowsill7 Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013
True a lot of people do. I guess it is the getting through the situation that counts :)
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013   General Artist
yep, it's true :)
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Bad--Blood Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013
This is a great poem, I can relate to it incredibally.
Is it alright if I use this on my page, maybe? I'd give you credit and link back to your page, though, of course. ^^
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013   General Artist
yeah, of course its alright :) Thanks for asking and thanks for the comment :)
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Grnideladeee Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013
Very nice
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013   General Artist
thanks :)
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AlwaysCreative Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
awwwww.....
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012   General Artist
lol I think it was me who needed the tissues on this one :)
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AlwaysCreative Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
lol ^^
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Vegetabelle Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Student General Artist
Sometimes short poems are the best.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012   General Artist
yeah, i suppose if it says everything you want it to say it doesnt matter how short it is
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Vegetabelle Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012  Student General Artist
EXACTLY! Very well said.
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DariaGALLERY Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
mmm......i know this story......pure emotions.....

i like it much kitty)
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012   General Artist
aww i hope you are happy now though?? and in love maybe? :)

thanks!
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DariaGALLERY Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
i'm super happy now)))) and in love, this why i'm happy))) thank you for asking)))
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012   General Artist
awww thats such good news!! I am really happy for you, you deserve it
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DariaGALLERY Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
:huggle:
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victor555 Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
similar story happened to me
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012   General Artist
I'm sorry to hear that. Seems its something that most people go through at some point in their lives

thanks for reading and commenting on this :)
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Xantye Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Lol funny I find this the day after me and my boyfriend broke up. I'm at this stage now and probably will be for weeks but.. I'm sure time will help. Even if I know it will get better eventually.. doesn't make this "phase" suck any less.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012   General Artist
aww I am really sorry to hear that. I genuinely mean that too and understand your pain.

I hope it atleast helps a tiny bit to know you are not alone and every man and woman since the dawn of time has felt how we are feeling and has lived through it and in time felt better :)

but you're right, it sucks :hug:
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zembelle Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I think everyone who can claim to be a human being has felt this at some point or another. It's well-done. Inspires empathy.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012   General Artist
yeah, very true :)

glad you liked it, thanks
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chalekam Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I really relate with your poem. The love that never faded...thank you.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012   General Artist
glad you could relate and thanks for the comment :)
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Svitavotara Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012
So very beautiful. It's agreed that a lot of people can relate to this.

This is such a beautiful poem; hats off to you :)
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012   General Artist
thank you. I think most people have been there at one time or another :)
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awesomenessbringdr Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012
I felt just like this after my first gf
and bf
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012   General Artist
aww yeah, its tough but I suppose sad times make us appreciate the good times :)
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awesomenessbringdr Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012
Indeed C:
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CuddleSlut17 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Short but very well done. I was a senior when I felt this way even a little afterwards. The last stanza I could have invisioned myself screaming this at him
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012   General Artist
yeah, its a tough time isn't it. Especially when young and you feel these things for the first time :)
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CuddleSlut17 Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That's how I can relete to it so much. I have 6 years behind me with my first love. And I'm only 26 Feelings are always their you know.Everyone can relete to your work. That's what makes it great :)
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012   General Artist
:) so kind.

Yeah i suppose its these experiences that stay with us that shape us as people :)
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alivethroughart Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Hard to put into words that low feeling but you did well here simply - especially feel this
"In truth all that I want right now
Is to get through a day without crying" :tighthug::heart:
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012   General Artist
:) :hug: thanks Judy
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Loveislightblue Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Short, heart-wrenching, and lovely, I do hope that you are not feeling this way still. :hug:
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012   General Artist
I will be ok :) thank you Anna :hug:
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Loveislightblue Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Okay, as long as you say so. :) :hug:
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012   General Artist
so nice to have friends on here :) i hope you know i am here for you too
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Loveislightblue Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Of course! :) It's always a pleasure to help in anyway I can. :)
Thank you. :)
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RedStoryTeller Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012
Oh my gosh when i was back in middle and a freshman I could totally relate!! That's the thing about your poems people everywhere can relate! XD
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012   General Artist
aww I really do hope so. It means alot when people say they can relate

thank you :)
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RedStoryTeller Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012
You're welcome! XD
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FrozenHeartStables Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012  Student Digital Artist
:huggle: it's well done bro. stay strong
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012   General Artist
:) thank you. I will do :hug:
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