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In barely legible handwriting
Scribbled on to the medicine bottle label
Is my name Grayson Oliver Dowd
And two letters printed in ink of bold sable

In haste I didn't check the meaning
It makes sense now that O.D. stands for Once Daily
But I took it to mean Over Dose
Oh how my rational mind once again fails me

Soon after I see the weathered words
Inscripted deeply on to the granite gravestone
Here lies Grayson Oliver Dowd
With an epiphanic epitaph ‘he died alone’

Waking from my sleep I check the meaning
I realise R.I.P. stands for Rest In Peace
And not Recovery Is Possible
So my dose of dopamine I shall decrease

In barely legible handwriting
Scribbled onto the medicine bottle label
Is my name Grayson Oliver Dowd
And two letters printed in ink of bold sable

My shaking hand struggles with the child lock
Let me flush these pills away and out of sight
Oh Dear reads the letters on the label
It appears that you finished them all last night
realityisfarlessexciting.....something a little different to my usual
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extinguished-light Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Dude, your work is really great ;U;
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013   General Artist
thanks dude. It is much appreciated :)
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Sarahblerg Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013
I like this.. you have a great way with words. XD love his initials too.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2013   General Artist
:) my nod to the man upstairs lol

thank you, really glad you like it. Was a nice surprise all these faves and comments :)
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Sarahblerg Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013
haha sorry I kinda spammed you with all these!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013   General Artist
lol spammed sounds negative but i really love getting messages, faves etc :)
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LadyBrookeCelebwen Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This was interesting. :D
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013   General Artist
thanks and thank you for the faves too :)
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LadyBrookeCelebwen Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome!
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kewlkeyboards Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013
that was funky
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2013   General Artist
thank you, and thanks for the fave :)
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kewlkeyboards Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2013
you're welcome ^u^
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zorbo17 Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013  Student Writer
I like your wordplay and your subtleties, this was enjoyable to read.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2013   General Artist
thank you :) really glad you enjoyed it.
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Protagonist-117 Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow....
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2013   General Artist
:) thank you
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foxenbochs Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I like this very much. :) It has a dark sense of whimsy.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2013   General Artist
thank you, glad you liked it :)
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:iconfoxenbochs:
foxenbochs Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome!
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squimpmunk Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Very interesting and clever. Well done.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2013   General Artist
thank you very much :)
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squimpmunk Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You are most welcome, darling!
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racerman56 Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Love this, the play on the initials and his name
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013   General Artist
glad you enjoyed it, thank you :)
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:iconracerman56:
racerman56 Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
I did enjoy it very clever writing.....
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DruidCentaur Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I like the way you've made his initials as they are
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013   General Artist
:) glad you noticed that. Thanks for the comment
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0-Chiaki-0 Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I love it, its really great!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013   General Artist
thank you! :)
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0-Chiaki-0 Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome.
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nightlynxness Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013
Darkly disturbing... but I like it :D
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013   General Artist
yay, I like darkly disturbing lol :D thank you
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Hanachi-Shitsukki Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
What a clever wordplay and interesting flow! I do have to notice however that the second verse of the last stanza seems (and I say seems because it could've been intentional) to contain a little typo. (''out of site'' should've been ''out of sight'')
Good luck with your writing! ♥
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013   General Artist
arghhhhhhh i always make that mistake lol. It doesn't show up on spell check either because of the other meaning of the word xD

thank you for letting me know and I will change it now :)
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Hanachi-Shitsukki Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ahaha you're welcome ♥
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IDruDat Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Very clever indeed!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013   General Artist
thank you! :)
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MattVoscinar Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Student Writer
Wow... some of these lines just make me think "Why the hell didn't I think of that?!"

I realise R.I.P. stands for Rest In Peace
And not Recovery Is Possible

It makes sense now that O.D. stands for Once Daily
But I took it to mean Over Dose

Jesus, mate. Fantastic.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013   General Artist
glad you liked it mate, thank you :)
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FreeFallHero Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm pretty sure that there is a reason why his initials are as such
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013   General Artist
thanks for the comment. Glad you picked up on that :)
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Kagehahen Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013
I certainly like how morbidly quirky this was. And a lesson to always carefully read the label!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013   General Artist
:) I am glad it came as across as quirky! thank you :)
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BenHammonds Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013   Writer
wow, that is something :) what a thought LOL
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013   General Artist
haha, yep. Thanks Ben :)
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BenHammonds Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013   Writer
LOL you are most welcome :) LOL
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