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When I close my green eyes
If I focus I can see
People and places from my past
Etched in my memory

If a blind man closes his eyes
What can he possibly see
Without any visual images
Stored in his memory

How do I describe colour
To man who is born blind
The same way I describe my love
Within these heart felt rhymes


When I close my green eyes
I use my mind to conjure up
Dreams of the future, based on
Pages already written in my book

If a blind woman closes her eyes
What future can she see
Unable to visualise
Her fate and her destiny

How do I describe colour
To woman who is born blind
The same way I describe my love
Within these heart felt rhymes
blind
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Grnideladeee Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013
I am randomly looking for great work that intrigues me and low and behold ....Souljacol keeps coming up.....ty
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013   General Artist
It's really a boost to my confidence that you enjoy my poems. Makes me want to write more :)
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DariaGALLERY Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
i like it much))
mmm....i still cant find enough words to describe love.......its really hard))) hehe .......you know))))))))))
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012   General Artist
aww so you are in love now, Daria? :)

I have trouble too describing love. I used to think I knew what it was but had no idea. Now i do :)
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DariaGALLERY Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
oh i'm totally in love)))) hihi)))) i mean, i can tell what is love, but not enough words to describe all of my emotions) and will never be enough) its too big)

i'm really happy for you kitty))))) =)
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nightlynxness Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012
Nice =) Just so happens that I'm working on an assignment about eye diseases
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012   General Artist
:) nice coincidence :) thanks for reading and commenting
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Vegetabelle Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2012  Student General Artist
You make a valid point. This is lovely!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2012   General Artist
:) thank you!
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Vegetabelle Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2012  Student General Artist
You're welcome! :hug:
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Tinkerbellluv Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012
love it. <3
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012   General Artist
:) thank you
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Tinkerbellluv Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012
You're very welcome. :D
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k9Glacier Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
my eyes are green too,i told this to my blind friend once.she asked me what color her eyes were,i said light blue.she asked me what the difference was.we were sitting outside,on the trampoline on a spring day.I came to think on it,wanting desperately to have an answer for her,what i gave her was this.I told her to breath in deep,she did just so.a nice breeze passed us by,as it almost always does here in the plains region of texas. I told her that was green,that fresh feeling of being out in the open,that fresh grass smell with a hint of oak and evergreen,that yearning lay in long grass and let the dog curl up next to you,green was peace.i told her to get up and jump as high as she could and just let herself fall.she did,and we both giggled away when we fell.I asked her if she felt that suspended in air feeling,even for just a second,she said yes,kinda like flying she guessed.i told her that was light blue,the feeling of flight,that happy giddy feeling,the butterflies in your stomach you get going down a hill,i told her light blue was like the sky,never ending and beautiful,it was freedom. i guess that's about as good as i could get it too her. your poem made me think of this moment,but more than that it was heartfelt and lovely. gorgeous work.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012   General Artist
that is one of my favourite comments i have ever received :)

absolutely beautiful and i feel happy you posted it on my poem.

It sounds like it would be a great short story

thanks so much :)
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k9Glacier Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
it was the beauty of your that made me remember it though,so the credit is as much yours as it is mine :) perhaps i will make it a short story (have to make it less choppy sounding though and give more details XD ) when i do i'll put a link to your poem in the descriptions box :3
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012   General Artist
that would be great :)

thats why i love this site really. How people can inspire each other :)
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MistressofQuills Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2012  Student Writer
pretty:)
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012   General Artist
thank you :)
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MistressofQuills Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012  Student Writer
of course:D
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LunasMondgesicht Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2012
Wow, it is so... beautiful, amaizing. I love it!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2012   General Artist
thank you so much :)
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ConvictionbyLarm Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2012  Student General Artist
actually we've talked about blindess today and in a way it's not at all negative… wonderful poem, I love it. Sometimes I wish, my eyes were blind so I wouldn't be influenced and starring at people…
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2012   General Artist
yeah, its such an interesting thought. If everyone were blind and always had been blind. Things like racism etc just couldnt exist really in the same way anyway. And maybe people would feel more love rather than being distracted by temporary things like physical beauty :)

thanks for commenting :D
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DSteffi Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is awesome. :D
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012   General Artist
thank you and thanks for faving :)
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singletm32841 Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
So true. So, so, so true. Love is such a complicated thing, so how do you even begin to express it and tell others about it? Wonderful as always and a truly moving poem. :)
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012   General Artist
yeah, and i wonder if everyone feels the same love.

Before i fell in what i consider to be true love i used to just think it was liking someone alot. But my opinion changed meeting someone special. But it is very difficult to describe what the feeling is :) And then again there are other sorts of love like a mother feels for her child :)

thanks for reading and commenting on my poem. I really appreciate that :)
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NekoNinja13 Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012
wonderful
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012   General Artist
thank you and thanks for faving :)
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pengwens Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012
Wow, awesome
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012   General Artist
:) thank you very much
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pengwens Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012
Welcome!
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theresahelmer Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012  Professional Photographer
Thank you for sharing these beautiful words with us
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012   General Artist
oh and thank you for reading it and commenting, i appreciate it :)
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theresahelmer Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012  Professional Photographer
:heart: ~Theresa
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IpomeaTricolor Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
this is sooo beautiful :heart: now I wonder how I can describe colours and their beauty....
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012   General Artist
its so nice that something i wrote got you thinking, its really flattering.

thank you so much :)
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IpomeaTricolor Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
oh, you're welcome :) you often do that and not because I don't understand english :D:D
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kedonsine Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Let Me Risk Another Hug To Say....
This Is Beautiful, In More Ways Than One.
It's Good To Know That There Are Poets Who Write Of Others' Strife, Instead Of Their Pathetic Love Lives.

Wonderful!
More Ink To Your Quill
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012   General Artist
lol i will be gentle haha :hug:

very kind of you to say those words :)

thank you :)
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kedonsine Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Haha You're Welcome
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LilRedWagon Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012
WELL written! (SOME see with their EYES - SOME see with their HEARTS - SOME see with BOTH") .... SMILE .... LRW.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012   General Artist
yep, very true.

thanks so much for reading and commenting :)
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Jsaren Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012  Professional Interface Designer
Featured in my journal: [link]
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012   General Artist
aww thanks so much for featuring me :D
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Jsaren Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012  Professional Interface Designer
:) Welcome! You deserve it! ^^
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RaeClone Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Just simply amazing.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012   General Artist
thank you :)
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