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Will you take a Polaroid picture
And shake it in your hand
As you wait for it to develop
Please try to understand

That my smile might as well be painted
My tears photoshopped out
I'll add a caption on the reverse
So there will be no doubt

That I swing low like a pendulum
In a grandfather clock
That I fly high as a soaring kite
With each tick and each tock

Will you take a Polaroid picture
And hold me in your hands
As you wait for me to develop
Please try to understand

There'll be days when I'm as cold as ice
I'll thaw myself for you
And those things I said with aggression
I will try to undo

You should take me in to a dark room
And shake me till its clear
The love I show you is very real
The hate just comes from fear
not about myself but based on a friend of a friend :)
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:iconcrazymai:
CrazyMai Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2014  Student Writer
So beautiful :'( I can relate to it so much.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2014   General Artist
thank you :)
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:iconcrazymai:
CrazyMai Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2014  Student Writer
You are welcome :(
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:iconcrazymai:
CrazyMai Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2014  Student Writer
You are welcome :)
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WarriorCats09 Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow, this is amazing <3
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013   General Artist
aww thank you :) and thanks so much for all the faves :)
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KBeth Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012  Student General Artist
A very clever title, I must say. =) I love the way you contrasted the highs and the lows, you really did a good job of painting the picture.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012   General Artist
:) thank you

sometimes i come up with a title but that is all lol on this occasion i managed to write a poem too :)
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:iconmimzy-jm:
Mimzy-JM Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You said it.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2012   General Artist
:) thanks for taking time to read and comment
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:iconmimzy-jm:
Mimzy-JM Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Of course!
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AdrianosArt Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Beautiful work. I could definitely hear this as music in my head.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2012   General Artist
thank you :) I suppose i write all the poems in my head a little like i would do songs :)
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:iconadrianosart:
AdrianosArt Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2012  Student Digital Artist
You're welcome. Well, a lot of songs come from poetry -- heck, they are poetry -- so that makes perfect sense. =)
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2012   General Artist
:) yeah and i love bands and musicians who put alot of effort into lyrics, so its not just about the music. Sometimes in music the words seem like nonsense written down and wouldnt work really as a poem. I like it when you can write the lyrics down and they do look like a poem :)
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AdrianosArt Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Indeed. Some songs just aren't good, whether effort is put in or not. I suppose it really depends upon the audience and whether or not the message is being conveyed, because that is what art is all about: conveying/expressing some sort of message (with flair).
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AdrianosArt Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2012  Student Digital Artist
You're welcome. Well, a lot of songs come from poetry -- heck, they are poetry -- so that makes perfect sense. =)
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victor555 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
awesome work
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012   General Artist
thank you :)
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MynaOphelia Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012
This is a fantastic poem. The contrasts and parallels you draw with photographs (I love how it shows in the title itself) are very clever and really help to get your message across. And overall it's just written beautifully. Great job!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012   General Artist
thank you so much. A lovely comment and I am really pleased you enjoyed it :)
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:iconmynaophelia:
MynaOphelia Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012
Welcome, do write more poetry!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012   General Artist
i will try my best :)
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:iconmynaophelia:
MynaOphelia Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012
Yay!
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YogaTeacher Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I like this a lot, it has a good start and a confident feel to it, like it's someone flawed who really knows herself.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012   General Artist
thank you. I appreciate you reading it and commenting :)
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SoraIsMySky Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012  Student General Artist
This is one of my favourite poems of yours. <3
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2012   General Artist
aww thank you Dessy, that really means alot :)
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MistressofQuills Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012  Student Writer
beautiful! such emotion and pretty description...well done:)
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2012   General Artist
thank you, i am glad you liked it :)
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MistressofQuills Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2012  Student Writer
you're welcome:)
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HM-Dragon-Dreamer Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
lovely poem and very deep.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012   General Artist
thank you :)
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GoldenPichu Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Perfect :iconawwwplz:
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012   General Artist
:D thanks!
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GoldenPichu Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Np!
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IpomeaTricolor Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
this is really good :meow:
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012   General Artist
thank you :)
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vindiico Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012   General Artist
Love the clever take on bipolar people. Very true.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012   General Artist
I am glad you liked it, thank you :)
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:iconkedonsine:
kedonsine Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow! Amazing.
Yet Again U've Outdone Yourself
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012   General Artist
you're gonna get another hug if your not careful :D lol

thank you!!
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kedonsine Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Haha.
But It's True, I Wish I Could Write Like You
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BerriesSparrowMouse Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012  Student Digital Artist
The 5th part really hit me hard. This is very accurate...
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012   General Artist
thank you, i appreciate your comment :)
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mabapola Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is beautiful. If you yourself are not bipolar, you possess incredible insight
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012   General Artist
thank you :)

I do experience ups and down but I am not bipolar. I just try to do my best to put myself into situations others are in

I am glad you liked it :)
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Mandolin77 Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012   Writer
You know, I like the phrase 'Bi-polaroid.' I think that's what I ought to start calling myself. :XD:
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012   General Artist
lol go for it :D

thank you for reading and commenting!
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ImAnOddity Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012
I nearly cried while reading this.
As I person with Minor Bi-Polaris, I can relate to this on many levels. '
The one stanza that really hit a nerve, was:

"You should take me in to a dark room
And shake me till its clear
The love I show you is very real
The hate just comes from fear.


Thank you so much for writing this. You have so much talent!
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