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As a child I was kicked by a horse
While approaching from behind
It knocked me clean across the stable
This fragile framed boy of nine
I tried so hard to be strong and brave
And as Mother wiped my tears away
All I could think was I must return
To the stable the very next day

I barely slept a wink that night
For thinking about the steed
And how the doctor said I‘d be dead
If hoof had hit below my knee
Running my hand over the horseshoe
That was bruised onto my thigh
I felt a very real connection
Between the animal and I

Mother woke me as dawn broke
Asked if I still wanted to go
To visit the scene of the crime
To visit my equus foe
I nodded bravely and forced a smile
And with that we were on our way
I recognised the farmers son
I recognised the bales of hay

And there he was right in front of me
He seemed bigger than before
But there was no fear in my heart
Just a sense of wonder and awe
The farmers son took me by the hand
And as he tended to its mane
He fed the horse a sugar cube
And encouraged me to do the same

So I held my hand to its lips
And despite the size of its teeth
It took the treat with gentle ease
Never once hurting me
My heart was beating fast but steady
While my bones quivered like a leaf
Yet I knew the moral of the story
Was not going to be lost on me

We may have great power within us
Whether physical or of mind
We may be a lover or a fighter
Or just a little boy of nine
And though we can't escape our nature
No matter how we try to live
As beautifully flawed wild animals
We atleast have the power to forgive
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Broken-Blues Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013
aww this is so beautiful and so inspiring, you have a way with words that not only make people think but make them feel, and i bet everyone who reads this feel moved by it, cause I do (:
i remember now, you were asking me if i like horses, i need to talk to you about something (: :heart:
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013   General Artist
aww thank you :) i am glad i moved you.

oooh sounds interesting. What do you have to talk to me about?? :)
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TijonWolfsMajestys Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Beautifully said :)
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013   General Artist
aww thanks :)
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TijonWolfsMajestys Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Welcome ^^
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ofelialoov Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is great and so strong and just... Amazing. :)
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013   General Artist
thank you! :)
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coldfire323 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013
This poem flowed so well, so aesthetically pleasing and musical. o_o
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013   General Artist
:) thank you. Glad you think so.
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WillowWaves Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013
How beautiful, I thought it was going into a completely different direction :)
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013   General Artist
When I started writing it I wasn't sure where it was going either lol.

thanks for the comment :)
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ThatOneGirl303 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Great write.
How do you do it? I can never seem to make my writings longer without them watering down, yet you seem to do it with such poise and delicacy while keeping your points strong. Needless to say, Very impressive.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013   General Artist
thank you :)

I was worried this was too long. But I tried my best to make sure it was only as long as it needed to be

:hug:
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Harzlek Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013
Well, crap. That was impressive.
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Spiritkittyartist330 Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013
you jelly bro?
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:iconharzlek:
Harzlek Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2013
a little...
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013   General Artist
:) thanks!
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:iconharzlek:
Harzlek Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013
No need to thank me for the truth.
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Narcaholic Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013  Student
Lovely poem :D
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013   General Artist
thank you :D
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cupcakekitten20 Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013
I love writing, and I love animals, so I love this :aww:
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013   General Artist
me too :) well I love writing and animals anyway. I wouldnt go as far to say i love this poem cause I wouldnt want to sound arrogant xD

thanks for the lovely comment :)
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KuraiTenshiV Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013  Hobbyist
I love it.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013   General Artist
thank you :)
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:iconkuraitenshiv:
KuraiTenshiV Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013  Hobbyist
Np =)
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DevonEaton Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Now that was just perfect. I often have trouble trying to get a moral across in some of my own works, often because I wrote it without one in mind and it came to me as went, but if I tried to slip one in there it always sounds forced. This one was so eloquent though.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013   General Artist
I am glad it came across that way. I sort of just started writing at first about this experience I had then wanted to get across what I learnt. But I know what you mean, I didnt want it to sound forced.

thank you :)
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Kokorookaikasuru Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013  Student General Artist
Wonderful
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013   General Artist
thank you :)
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nightlynxness Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013
Aww... A sweet story with morals to learn, I like. I really liked how it ended! =D
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013   General Artist
thank you, you did well to get to the end. lol i wasnt sure people would bother reading it all with it being so long :D
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:iconnightlynxness:
nightlynxness Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2013
Haha, nah, it wasn't too long =)
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Perianth5 Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013  Student General Artist
So beautiful!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013   General Artist
thank you! :)
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:iconperianth5:
Perianth5 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Student General Artist
You're welcome!
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