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I cried tonight
But it was not like before
When someone to love me
Was all I implored

This time the tears fell
Because my wish has come true
My prayers have been answered
In the wonder that is you

I smiled tonight
But it was not like before
When it was just a physical response
Nothing more

This time I smile
Not from the mouth but the eyes
This lost little boy
Has finally come back to life

I wrote tonight
This poem, these words
About my best friend
my love, my girl

This time it seems
That indeed you feel the same
I prayed to God for your arrival
and soon after you came
realityisfarlessexciting
:heart:
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RedStoryTeller Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012
This is so cute :D
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2012   General Artist
thank you :D
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RedStoryTeller Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2012
Welcome
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DeadManWalking26 Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2012
This one is amazing. Really touching on so many,so deep, layers.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2012   General Artist
thank you very much :)
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peteachu Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2012
Thank you for the gift of your poems they're quite good.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2012   General Artist
thank you very much for taking time to tell me :)
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jEsUs-Fr3ak Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2012  Student General Artist
oh wow this is an awesome, cute poem! :dalove:
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2012   General Artist
glad you liked it and thanks for the fave :)
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jEsUs-Fr3ak Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2012  Student General Artist
you're very welcome!I had to fave it! :D
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Hello, you have been featured in my weekly dA love for everyone! article.
Have a nice day :huggle:
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2012   General Artist
aww thanks very much :)
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:iconlintu47:
lintu47 Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem :huggle:
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LisAlice5472 Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Very, very sweet little poem ^_^
Were you said when u wrote it?
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2012   General Artist
i was actually the happiest i have been for a long while

thank you :)
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LisAlice5472 Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
^_^ ^_^ good for you!
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AngelofDarkness316 Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautifully put,I love it!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2012   General Artist
thank you, glad you liked it :)
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:iconangelofdarkness316:
AngelofDarkness316 Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Your welcome :3
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Swiss-Dilettante Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Ah, this is a very good poem, sir. I really like the emotional tone you used; it suits it well. Thanks for sharing!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2012   General Artist
oh thank you for watching! :) and the very nice comments too
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Vegetabelle Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2012  Student General Artist
AH! you're making me cry happy tears too!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2012   General Artist
hooray! lol i have spent months trying to get happy tears out of you!
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Vegetabelle Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2012  Student General Artist
aw really? That's so sweet! You're such a great friend, Colin.
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2012   General Artist
you too, Kerry :)
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Dracoan Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Sounds like the narrator fell in love.
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Dracoan Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome.
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therainbowsshadow Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
So beautiful... :love:
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2012   General Artist
:) thank you very much
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therainbowsshadow Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
you're totally welcome :)
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MysticHorns Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2012  Professional Writer
aww...lovely written!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2012   General Artist
:) thank you! Thanks for watching me too
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Purplefairydust Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2012   Writer
WOAH!! This is awesome!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2012   General Artist
aww thanks! thank you for watching me too, i will watch you back :)
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uberschnitsel Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2012
Nice
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2012   General Artist
thank you :)
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nightlynxness Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2012
So sweet, may be a bit cheesy, but hey, we all need a bit of cheese sometimes ^^
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2012   General Artist
:) thank you very much!
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nekokosaki Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2012
wow its so good!! reminds me of somthing
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2012   General Artist
thanks :)
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nekokosaki Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2012
your welcome ^^
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paper-priestess Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2012  Student General Artist
awhh this is so cute :)
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2012   General Artist
:) thank you!
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SkyeSteiner Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2012  Student Writer
Wonderful! I'm happy for you ^o^
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