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I compare my parents courtship
To a plane taking to the sky
The ascent is the conception
Of me, my inner self and I

And should I survive the full term
From utero I shall emerge
As I jump from the aeroplane
Spiralling my way down to Earth

Descending through the atmosphere
I discern that this is my life
As the weather reflects my mood
From the sunshine to lightning strikes

The clouds they tend to come and go
As I tumble my way on through
A metaphor for life’s problems
Small dilemmas to big issues

But I choose not to close my eyes
As terra firma comes into sight
Even though death approaches me
At the unerring speed of life

If I open my parachute
If I open my torrid mind
A soft landing will greet my bones
As my soul leaves this world behind
Air Born(e)
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nightlynxness Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2013
Again, very beautifully done!! Fascinating concept, rather than being on earth as where we live our lives but the very end of it... I like it!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2013   General Artist
:) thank you so much for this and all the other comments. I really do appreciate it :)
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EnlightenedEnigma Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
That last part was like... Orgasmic..
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013   General Artist
:D That's always nice to hear! thanks :)
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SamiSalsa Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013  Student Writer
amazing
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2013   General Artist
thank you :)
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SamiSalsa Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2013  Student Writer
welcome (:
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EbonyWolf10 Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013
This is really nice. The words flow very fluently and the word choice and the metaphors are really we chosen. :) good work.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013   General Artist
:) thank you. That's a really kind comment.
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is really nice. Great job! :)

I have to check out your other writings.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013   General Artist
thanks for that, I appreciate it :)
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No problem, man.

Your poetry is really incredible. You definitely have a new watcher in me. :)
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013   General Artist
thats really kind of you. I am gonna watch you back :)
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, thank you so much. I really, really appreciate that. :)
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013   General Artist
oh you are welcome :)
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KikuMizu Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013
I liked it a lot but just one issue: "sight" instead of "site." The way you have the poem worded, it is in vision, not "the site" of something happening.
Otherwise, it was rather clever and worth reading. That being said...I have a lot to read...excuse me.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013   General Artist
Thank you for highlighting that, I have changed it :)

Oh thanks for the fave too, I appreciate it.
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KikuMizu Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013
No problem :)
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OrigenTheLoner Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Nice
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013   General Artist
thank you :)
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connie1995 Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013
This is amazing :)
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013   General Artist
:) thank you. I am glad you liked it.

Oh and thanks for faving too!
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