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Now take me down to my dark and sombre place
So I can write woeful words such as this
But don’t leave me there to give life to my thoughts
As I’m cursed with such soft and slender wrists

And hands that are capable of mastering
The medicine bottles infant safe lock
No more than three a day the prescription says
I peel off the label and down the lot

Now take me down to my dark and sombre place
Where skies are as black as a raven’s wing
And with no potential to spread them out wide
With my meek, melancholic offerings

Just a pin prick of light in the sable sky
Like the raven’s eye within its feathers
And as it blinks moments before taking flight
I am cast into darkness forever

Now take me down to my dark and sombre place
Where each word I write feels like burning wax
Slowly dripping over my eyes, nose and lips
Till it sets into a full facial cast

Leading to paralysis of countenance
Or at least indeed the absence of one
The candelabra embellishes my plight
But this wick of woe remains just as long
please check this amazing illustration from my good friend :icondariagallery: Daria [link] It is based on this poem. Go look at the rest of her gallery too. It's definitely worth it :)
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doldydo Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It's Brilliant!:clap:I love your use of words and the ambiguous meaning behind them. Somehow it remind's me of Edgar Allen Poe too. One of his greatest poems also featured a raven.
Good job :D
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013   General Artist
thank you. A few people have mentioned Poe when reading my poems. Of course this is a huge compliment :)
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doldydo Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
yup  I love his works!:D and your welcome :)
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ThrivingEbe Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013
wow you have a fantastic way with words, so dark but so beautifully crafted love the metaphors and images, you should never stop writing, use the darkness as a light to write <3
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013   General Artist
thank you :) I might just take your advice
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ThrivingEbe Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013
good (: cause you know i win :D
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013   General Artist
lol mayyyyyyyyybe
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ThrivingEbe Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013
duuuuude!
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:iconrifle1980:
Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013   General Artist
you duuuude! lol
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ThrivingEbe Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013
xD
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DarkLover33 Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013   Writer
so beautiful and dark.. love it!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013   General Artist
thank you! :)
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DarkLover33 Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013   Writer
Your welcome! :)
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BenHammonds Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2013   Writer
Great stuff, a true image that you have painted with words.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013   General Artist
:) glad you like it, thank you.
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BenHammonds Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013   Writer
I do indeed :)
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artistic-heart13 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
So dark and miserable...I love it. So descriptive, it reminds me of E.A. Poe.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013   General Artist
:) Thank you. The most flattering thing you could say :)
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artistic-heart13 Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You are very welcome.
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RoadToWhatever Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I really like the repetition of "Now take me down to my dark and sombre place", don't always like that in a poem, but it works here :).
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013   General Artist
yeah, I know what you mean. I am glad you think it works here though.

thanks for the comment :)
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cupcakekitten20 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013
Wow! Those last two stanzas are powerful! :wow:
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013   General Artist
:) glad you like them! thank you :hug:
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slyvintagedevil Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
really tripped on it... very deep and ambiguous meaning...
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013   General Artist
:) thank you
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Student General Artist
For some reason this reminded me of Edgar Allan Poe, it's beautiful c:
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013   General Artist
thanks Soph. A few people have mentioned Poe. In fact even in other poems. I have never really read much by him or any other poet xD

I really should make an effort to read these great poets :)
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013  Student General Artist
Haha you'd like them, sometimes reading other bits of poetry helps inspire me and it's just a nice way to relax c:
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013   General Artist
yeah, i think i will :)
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x-Kezza-X Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is beautifully written. It's very dark, but have a way with words. :) I especially love your use of imagery.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013   General Artist
thank you. I really appreciate you saying so :)
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Indigo-Moon-Shadow Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Very beautiful: the imagery is vivid and the words flow so nicely.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013   General Artist
:) thank you very much
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Freeze-ice-fox Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Student General Artist
This is amazing. Beautifully written. It almost reminds me of Poe.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013   General Artist
thank you. A really nice comment. I appreciate it :)
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epicawesomeness777 Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013
I love the wording. Not a lot of people know what embellishes or sable or plight means.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013   General Artist
:) thank you. I do try and make an effort to expand my vocabulary :)
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epicawesomeness777 Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013
I do too, but it takes a while for me to actually remember the definition. Could you check out my new freehanded poem and give me feedback?
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013   General Artist
yeah, I am the same. The more I use it the more chance I have of remembering it. But sometimes it is difficult to use such words in every day life :)

yeah, I will have a look at your page and watch you and stuff now :)

have a great weekend!
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mailsprower1 Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013
I like the part about pills.
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013   General Artist
thank you and thanks for the llama too :)
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