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I was just nineteen years old
When I cut myself in two
The boy I wanted them to see
And the boy they never knew

Hid my hollow bones away
I've been hiding ever since
Yes, you may see the odd smile
But only ever a glimpse

But my heart was never broken
It was born in several pieces
And with every passing year
The size of the segments decreases

I was just nineteen years old
When I died for the first time
I did not cope so well
With leaving my childhood behind

I didn't want to face up
To these wretched bent back blues
But will I give in to the struggle?
No, with respect I refuse

See my grandfather gave me
The stubborn heart of an ox
I will die before I collapse
A coward I am not
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
A nice rhyme and over all very well written. I liked the message and how it described the "Die before defeat" concept however in a strange manner I guess ^^;
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014   General Artist
hey :) I am glad you enjoyed it. I like to add a little strangeness whenever possible lol

thanks for the comment :)
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You are very welcome :)
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jhadelapena Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
I can't..
just WOW!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013   General Artist
thank you :)
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Poemgirl15 Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
asdfghj this is perfection!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2013   General Artist
aww thank you! and thanks for the fave too :)
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Poemgirl15 Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
np :)
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shadowboxer23 Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2013
This is beautiful!
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Rifle1980 Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013   General Artist
thank you! :)
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